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In many countries the cost of living is rising. What are the effects on individuals and society? What measures can be taken to deal with this problem v.3

In many countries the cost of living is rising. What are the effects on individuals and society? What measures can be taken to deal with this problem v. 3
It is true that people in most countries are facing an increase in living expenditure. The main problem this causes is high pressure on low-income citizens and the most viable solution is the adjustment of base salary to support them for basic needs. The principal problem associated with escalating living costs is poor people tend to be under pressure. Most of them struggle to pay for daily essentials like electricity, internet and fuel bills, which forces them to work harder and earn more money to cover their living expenses. In the long term, both their mental and physical health will be seriously affected, which can cause poor performance at work and the lack of happiness in life. According to a recent survey from Oxford University, over 65% of people in Africa admit that they are so worried that they do not have enough quality time for themselves due to the rising cost and limit income. To tackle this problem, the government should introduce the policy of rising base salary for the citizens. People are more likely to burn out when the costs increase because of their insufficient budgets. Therefore, a higher base salary can allow low-paid workers to be more affordable and less stressed to pay attention to the enjoyment of life. For instance, in Singapore, although the expenditure is high, poor families still enjoy an acceptable standard of living thanks to the new salary policy from the government. In conclusion, the rise in living costs in many nations is the major issue that results in exhaustion. However, it can be addressed by improving the base salary for all citizens.
It is true that
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people
in most countries are facing an increase in
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living
expenditure. The main problem this causes is high pressure on low-income citizens and the most viable solution is the adjustment of
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base
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salary
to support them for basic needs.

The principal problem associated with escalating
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living
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costs
is poor
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people
tend to be under pressure. Most of them struggle to pay for daily essentials like electricity, internet and fuel bills, which forces them to work harder and earn more money to cover their
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living
expenses. In the long term, both their mental and physical health will be
seriously
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affected
, which can cause poor performance at work and the lack of happiness in life. According to a recent survey from Oxford University, over 65% of
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people
in Africa admit that they are
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so
worried that they do not have
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enough
quality time for themselves due to the rising
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cost
and limit income.

To tackle this problem, the
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government
should introduce the policy of rising
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base
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salary
for the citizens.
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People
are more likely to burn out when the
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costs
increase
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because
of their insufficient budgets.
Therefore
, a higher
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base
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salary
can
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allow
low-paid workers to be more affordable and less
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stressed
to pay attention to the enjoyment of life.
For instance
, in Singapore, although the expenditure is high, poor families
still
enjoy an acceptable standard of
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living
thanks to the new
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salary
policy from the
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government
.

In conclusion
, the rise in
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living
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costs
in
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many
nations is the major issue that results in exhaustion.
However
, it can
be addressed
by improving the
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base
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salary
for all citizens.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay In many countries the cost of living is rising. What are the effects on individuals and society? What measures can be taken to deal with this problem v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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