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In many countries, the amount of rubbish is rapidly increasing, why? Give your solutions. v.1

In many countries, the amount of rubbish is rapidly increasing, why? Give your solutions. v. 1
The rapid growth of the rubbish amount in many nations is being increasingly witnessed these days. In this essay, I shall discuss the main reasons why this change has occurred and suggest some solutions to prevent this situation from worsening. There are numerous reasons why this is happening and the prominent one is that overpopulation is ubiquitous in many developed countries as there are more job opportunities and better living conditions which can attract more people to move to the more developed areas. Additionally, we are living in a consumer culture nowadays as we tend to be encouraged to buy more goods, then throw them away to keep up the trend. A recent survey conducted in Japan has revealed that we are producing trashes in this year more than the last 5 years combined. As a result, this tendency is increasing common in recent years. The solutions to tackle difficulties associated with this tendency is not simple, but they do exist. In order to reduce the detrimental effects of this development, the rural area's infrastructure should be upgraded and well-maintained by the authorities as it can attract more people to move back. In addition, the governments need to propose a wide range of programs to raise public’s awareness of environmental protection. Take myself for example, I am fully aware of the significance of recycling after we attended the seminar led by the sustainable development organizations. Therefore, these measures can have a profound impact on the public. To sum up, the rising amount of garbage has become a hot topic of discussion in the society. In this essay, I explained the main reasons for this development and suggested some methods to minimize the negative effects of this trend.
The rapid growth of the rubbish amount in
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many
nations is being
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witnessed these days. In this essay, I shall discuss the main reasons why this
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change
has occurred and suggest
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some
solutions to
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prevent
this situation from worsening.

There are numerous reasons why this is happening and the prominent one is that overpopulation is ubiquitous in
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many
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developed countries
as there are more job opportunities and better living conditions which can attract more
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people
to
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move
to the more developed areas.
Additionally
, we are living in a consumer culture nowadays as we tend to
be encouraged
to
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buy
more
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goods
, then throw them away to
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keep
up the trend. A recent survey conducted in Japan has revealed that we are producing trashes in this year more than the last 5 years combined.
As a result
, this tendency is increasing common in recent years.

The solutions to tackle difficulties associated with this tendency is not simple,
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but
they do exist. In order to
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reduce
the detrimental effects of this development, the rural area's infrastructure should
be upgraded
and well-maintained by the authorities as it can attract more
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people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
back.
In addition
, the
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governments
need to propose a wide range of programs to raise public’s awareness of environmental protection. Take myself
for example
, I am
fully
aware of the significance of recycling after we attended the seminar led by the sustainable development organizations.
Therefore
, these measures can have a profound impact on the public.

To sum up, the rising amount of garbage has become a hot topic of discussion in the society. In this essay, I
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explained
the main reasons for this development and suggested
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some
methods to minimize the
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negative
effects of this trend.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In many countries, the amount of rubbish is rapidly increasing, why? Give your solutions. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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