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In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those causes? v.13

In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those causes? v. 13
An immense increase in the crime rate around the globe is a topic of debate these days. This essay will discuss the main causes of this development and possible ways to avoid these causes. Firstly, the lack of employment opportunities is considered one of the main causes of the skyrocketing boost in illegal activities. According to research conducted by Harvard University, financially unable to meet the living expenses have a direct relation to the crime rate boom in society. Secondly, adverse situation of law and order is equally responsible for this problem. Lack of proper laws and not the proper implementation of existing laws result in unwanted situations. Recent research by the University of Punjab concluded that people who get away easily after committing a crime are more likely to do it again due to the lack of implementation of laws. Thirdly, not getting their basic human rights is one of the major motives to do criminal activities. The crime rate can be decreased by providing employment opportunities to the unemployed population. The government can provide technical training to those who are less educated. The informatory programs can be arranged to spread awareness about the consequences of breaking the laws. Longer punishments are considered an effective way of reducing the crime rate. Rehabilitation centres should be made to integrate criminals with society after the completion of their imprisonment. The government and society as a whole should work together to provide basic rights to everyone struggling to get. To conclude, using the aforementioned suggestions to deal with the increasing number of crime rate, we can significantly reduce this alarming development.
An immense increase in the
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crime
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rate
around the globe is a topic of debate these days. This essay will discuss the main causes of this development and possible ways to avoid these causes.

Firstly
, the lack of employment opportunities
is considered
one of the main causes of the skyrocketing boost in illegal activities. According to research conducted by Harvard University,
financially
unable to
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meet
the living expenses have a direct relation to the
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crime
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rate
boom in society.
Secondly
, adverse situation of
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law
and order is
equally
responsible for this problem. Lack of proper
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laws
and not the proper implementation of existing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laws
result in unwanted situations. Recent research by the University of Punjab concluded that
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people
who
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get
away
easily
after committing a
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crime
are more likely to do it again due to the lack of implementation of
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laws
.
Thirdly
, not getting their basic human rights is one of the major motives to do criminal activities.

The
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crime
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rate
can
be decreased
by providing employment opportunities to the unemployed population. The
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government
can provide technical training to those who are less educated.
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The
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informatory
programs can
be arranged
to spread awareness about the consequences of breaking the
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laws
. Longer punishments
are considered
an effective way of reducing the
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crime
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rate
. Rehabilitation
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centres
should
be made
to integrate criminals with society after the completion of their imprisonment. The
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government
and society as a whole should work together to provide basic rights to everyone struggling to
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get
.

To conclude
, using the aforementioned suggestions to deal with the increasing number of
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crime
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rate
, we can
significantly
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reduce
this alarming development.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those causes? v. 13

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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