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In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. Do you agree or disagree? v.6

In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. v. 6
One question that has caused a great deal of controversy over the years is whether the government should impose higher taxes on fast food since there is a growing number of citizens enduring health repercussions from the excessive consumption of fast food. In my opinion, although it is essential for the government to impose higher taxes on fast food, there are also alternative measures which the government could act. On the one hand, it is clear that imposing higher taxes on fast food is effective in preventing fatal health diseases. Firstly, since fast food could result in fatal health diseases that affect public health, the government has the responsibility to intervene in the fast food industry. In fact, the coronary heart diseases, which result from high sugar-based food, take as much as 500, 000 individuals lives each year, which would mean a reduction in a productive workforce for the nation's development. Secondly, by imposing higher taxes, many people, especially those who are under-privileged, may find fast food unavoidable and thus would refrain from purchasing fast food and start preparing meals at home On the other hand, although imposing higher taxes could be beneficial, there are certain methods that are as effective in order to reduce health problems resulting from fast food. Firstly, the government should raise the public awareness of how fast food could have detrimental effects on our body. This could be done by producing informative TV programs and incorporating courses on home-cooking in school curriculum to not only provide alternative healthy options but also teach children how to ensure a healthy diet. In that way, the government could still reduce the consumption of fast food while maintaining a sustainable food source for the under-privileged. Secondly, the government could enact laws that fast food manufacturers must involve healthy ingredients, such as vegetables, in the process of producing fast food. As a result, a balanced diet is acquired and a healthy lifestyle is maintained by the citizens. In conclusion, the act of imposing higher taxes by the authorities could somewhat reduce the detrimental impact of fast food to the public health such as exerting a financial pressure on under-privileged citizens. However, in my opinion, there are superior measures which the government could take such as raising awareness or enacting strict laws on fast food.
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should impose higher
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taxes
on
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fast
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since there is a growing number of citizens enduring
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health
repercussions from the excessive consumption of
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fast
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food
. In my opinion, although it is essential for the
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government
to impose higher
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taxes
on
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fast
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, there are
also
alternative measures which the
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government
could act.

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clear
that
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higher
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taxes
on
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fast
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food
is effective in preventing fatal
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health
diseases.
Firstly
, since
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fast
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food
could result in fatal
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health
diseases that affect public
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health
, the
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government
has the responsibility to intervene in the
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fast
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food
industry. In fact, the coronary heart diseases, which result from high sugar-based
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food
, take as much as 500, 000 individuals
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lives
each year, which would mean a reduction in a productive workforce for the nation's development.
Secondly
, by
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imposing
higher
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taxes
,
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many
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people
,
especially
those who are under-privileged, may find
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fast
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unavoidable and
thus
would refrain from purchasing
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fast
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and
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start
preparing meals at home

On the other hand
, although
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higher
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taxes
could be beneficial, there are certain methods that are as effective in order to
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reduce
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health
problems resulting from
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fast
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food
.
Firstly
, the
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government
should raise the public awareness of how
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fast
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food
could have detrimental effects on our body. This could
be done
by producing informative TV programs and incorporating courses on home-cooking in school curriculum to not
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only
provide alternative
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healthy
options
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also
teach children how to ensure a
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healthy
diet. In that way, the
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could
still
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reduce
the consumption of
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fast
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while maintaining a sustainable
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food
source for the under-privileged.
Secondly
, the
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government
could enact laws that
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fast
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manufacturers
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must
involve
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healthy
ingredients, such as vegetables, in the process of producing
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fast
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food
.
As a result
, a balanced diet
is acquired
and a
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healthy
lifestyle
is maintained
by the citizens.

In conclusion
, the act of
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imposing
higher
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taxes
by the authorities could somewhat
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reduce
the detrimental impact of
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fast
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food
to the public
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health
such as exerting a financial pressure on under-privileged citizens.
However
, in my opinion, there are superior measures which the
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government
could take such as raising awareness or enacting strict laws on
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fast
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food
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
384 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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