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In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. Do you agree or disagree? v.4

Smoking has been banned in public places like parks, beaches, restaurants and public transportation in many nations. This essay agrees with this idea because this ban can lessen the risk of passive smoking and also stop youngsters from getting influenced by it. The main reason why public smoking should be prohibited is to protect people from the health problems associated with second hand smoke. That is to say, non-smokers who accidentally inhale other people’s tobacco smoke are highly prone to health issues like lung cancer, cardiovascular diseases and respiratory difficulties. According to the World health organization, passive smoking causes six lakh deaths each year and among that one third are children. In 2004, a nationwide comprehensive smoke free law prohibiting public smoking was implemented in Ireland and after four weeks, the country observed a 69 percent reduction in the number of patients affected by passive smoking. The second reason is that forbidding smoking in public places saves / prevents young people from getting attracted to it. Smoking cigarettes is considered as a status symbol by many people and some teenagers may smoke just to fit in. By banning these products, young children will be less vulnerable to smoking and they will not be easily tempted to try such things. For example, In Ireland, after announcing public smoking as illegal, the number of teenage smokers nearly halved in a few months. In conclusion, banning smoking in public places is a good move as it prevents innocent people from dying of passive smoking and discourages young people from getting attracted to smoking.
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has
been banned
in
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public
places like parks, beaches, restaurants and
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public
transportation in
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many
nations. This essay
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agrees
with this
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idea
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because
this ban can lessen the
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risk
of
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passive
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smoking
and
also
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stop
youngsters from getting influenced by it.

The main reason why
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public
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smoking
should
be prohibited
is to protect
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people
from the health problems associated with second hand
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smoke
.
That is
to say, non-smokers who
accidentally
inhale other
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people’s
tobacco
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smoke
are
highly
prone to health issues like lung cancer, cardiovascular diseases and respiratory difficulties. According to the
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World health organization
,
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passive
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smoking
causes six lakh deaths each year and among that one third are children. In 2004, a nationwide comprehensive
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smoke free
law prohibiting
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public
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smoking
was implemented
in Ireland and after four weeks, the country observed a 69 percent reduction in the number of patients
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affected
by
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passive
smoking.

The second reason is that forbidding
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smoking
in
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public
places saves /
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prevents
young
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people
from getting attracted to it.
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Smoking
cigarettes
is considered
as a status symbol by
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many
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people
and
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some
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teenagers
may
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smoke
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just
to fit in. By banning these products, young children will be less vulnerable to
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smoking and
they will not be
easily
tempted to try such things.
For example
, In Ireland, after announcing
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public
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smoking
as illegal, the number of teenage smokers
nearly
halved in a few months.

In conclusion
, banning
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smoking
in
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public
places is a
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good
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move
as it
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prevents
innocent
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people
from dying of
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passive
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smoking
and discourages young
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people
from getting attracted to
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smoking
.
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IELTS essay In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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