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In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. Do you agree or disagree? v.5

In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. Do you agree or disagree? Smoking has been banned in public places like parks, hospitals, public transport and restaurants in many nations. This essay agrees with this initiative because it reduces the harmful effects of passive smoking and also encourages smokers to quit. The primary reason why making it illegal to smoke in public makes sense is preventing people from having to breathe in second-hand smoke. Passive smoking can lead to many smoking-related diseases such as lung cancer, heart disease and stroke, and is something that non-smokers cannot avoid in the presence of a smoker. The British Medical Association found that non-smokers who were regularly exposed to tobacco smoke were 4 times more likely to develop lung cancer than those who did not have to breathe in second-hand smoke. The second main reason is that this ban helps those addicted to cigarettes quit their habit. When smokers and non-smokers socialise together, the smokers are often ostracised from the group because they have to leave the company of everyone else if they want to light up. As a result, smokers who decided to quit would feel more a part of the social gatherings they attend, and this should encourage people who smoke to give it up. This has proven particularly effective in Ireland, the first country to introduce a nationwide ban, where people have to leave a bar or restaurant and smoke outside. In conclusion, making it against the law to smoke around strangers should be encouraged because it prevents innocent people from dying of passive smoking and reduces the number of smokers.
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many
countries,
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smoking
is
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now
illegal in
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public
places.
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Many
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people
believe that such a ban
is justified
. Do you
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agree
or disagree?

Smoking has
been banned
in
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public
places like parks, hospitals,
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public
transport and restaurants in
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many
nations. This essay
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agrees
with this initiative
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because
it
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reduces
the harmful effects of passive
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smoking
and
also
encourages smokers to quit.

The primary reason why making it illegal to
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smoke
in
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public
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makes
sense is preventing
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people
from having to breathe in second-hand
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smoke
. Passive
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smoking
can lead to
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many
smoking-related diseases such as lung cancer, heart disease and stroke, and is something that non-smokers cannot avoid in the presence of a smoker. The British Medical Association found that non-smokers
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who
were
regularly
exposed to tobacco
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smoke
were 4 times more likely to develop lung cancer than those
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who
did not
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have to
breathe in second-hand smoke.

The second main reason is that this ban
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helps
those addicted to cigarettes quit their habit. When smokers and non-smokers socialise together, the smokers are
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often
ostracised from the group
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because
they
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have to
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leave
the
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company
of everyone else if they want to light up.
As a result
, smokers
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who
decided to quit would feel more a part of the social gatherings they attend, and this should encourage
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people
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who
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smoke
to give it up. This has proven
particularly
effective in Ireland, the
first
country to introduce a nationwide ban, where
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people
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have to
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leave
a bar or restaurant and
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smoke
outside.

In conclusion
, making it against the law to
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smoke
around strangers should
be encouraged
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because
it
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prevents
innocent
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people
from dying of passive
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smoking
and
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reduces
the number of smokers.
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IELTS essay In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
281 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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