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In many countries plastic shopping bags are the main source of rubbish, causing pollution on land and in the water. Some people think they should be banned. to what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

In many countries plastic shopping bags are the main source of rubbish, causing pollution on land and in the water. Some people think they should be banned. v. 3
In recent times, plastic bags used for shopping have been a major cause of pollution in many countries. Hence, some people believe that these items should be proscribed in order to reduce contamination of the earth. However, I disagree with this view. Although, the indiscriminate disposal of plastic bags such as nylon bags has contaminated both the land and the sea, this would have been minimized if nylon bags are recycled. For example, the authorities should set up collection banks for these items in residential homes and offices in order to aid the process of collecting these bags for recycling. This will help prevent inappropriate discard of waste in the environment and it will reduce outsourcing of raw materials for plastics thus, makes their production easier and faster. Furthermore, biodegradable non-plastics such as paper bags are not readily available in many countries. This makes it difficult to replace plastic bags. For instance, the cost of a single paper bag is often the cost of three nylon bags in Nigeria, thus this add to the cost incurred during shopping. In addition, paper bags may not be suitable to collect frozen items like ice creams, fishes and beverages, thus, this makes the sole use of nylon bags impracticable when buying certain consumables. As a result, plastic bags are not completely replaceable in some countries. In conclusion, although plastic shopping bags do contaminate our environment due to their indiscriminate disposal, these items should not be banned because they can be easily collected and recycled. More so, cheap alternative bags are not readily available. There should be more public awareness on recycling these pollutants.
In recent times,
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plastic
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bags
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used
for shopping have been a major cause of pollution in
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many
countries.
Hence
,
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some
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people
believe that these
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items
should
be proscribed
in order to
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reduce
contamination of the earth.
However
, I disagree with this view.

Although, the indiscriminate disposal of
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plastic
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bags
such as nylon
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bags
has contaminated both the land and the sea, this would have
been minimized
if nylon
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bags
are recycled
.
For example
, the authorities should set up collection banks for these
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items
in residential homes and offices in order to aid the process of collecting these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bags
for recycling. This will
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help
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prevent
inappropriate discard of waste in the environment and it will
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reduce
outsourcing of raw materials for
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plastics
thus
,
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makes
their production easier and faster.

Furthermore
, biodegradable non-plastics such as paper
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bags
are not
readily
available in
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many
countries. This
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makes
it difficult to replace
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plastic
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bags
.
For instance
, the cost of a single paper
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bag
is
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often
the cost of three nylon
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bags
in Nigeria,
thus
this
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add
to the cost incurred during shopping.
In addition
, paper
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bags
may not be suitable to collect frozen
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items
like ice creams, fishes and beverages,
thus
, this
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makes
the sole
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use
of nylon
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bags
impracticable when buying certain consumables.
As a result
,
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plastic
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bags
are not completely replaceable in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
countries.

In conclusion
, although
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plastic
shopping
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bags
do contaminate our environment due to their indiscriminate disposal, these
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items
should not
be banned
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because
they can be
easily
collected and recycled. More
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so
,
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cheap
alternative
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bags
are not
readily
available. There should be more public awareness on recycling these pollutants.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay In many countries plastic shopping bags are the main source of rubbish, causing pollution on land and in the water. Some people think they should be banned. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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