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In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why do people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food? v.6

In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why do people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food? v. 6
It is true to say that the consumption of imported groceries has grown up in recent years for their excellent alluring presentations. However, In my opinion, I firmly believe that some steps can help to encourage people to eat locally. In many countries, people are doing this job with much happiness and there are several reasons why they love to use imported goodies for their menu as a meal regularly. First of all, the marketing policy is much attractive and appearing for appetizing such as colourful wrapping packet with expired date signal for alarming people for harmful and not encourage people to eat. Besides, it is easy to eat and much available in signed places and this food has tasty obviously and sizeable as well. For example, The Sunday Times recently published news that 69% of people in the UK love to buy pocketing imported meals because of their limited time and tasty flavours. On the other hand, there are some solutions to tackle this problem. Initially, a snack would be worth wrapping plastic to keep away from dust and flies which to attract customers and believes in buying and make for hygienic in processing which leads to customers much confident to eat. Moreover, must produce various kinds of peck by farmers, which contain nutrients and vitamins for local people and it is made to control outsider product for native people. For instance, when Japan made sure their native people eat cooked by wrapping plastic with a hygienic majority of people buy local mess continuously, as a result of the economy of Japan gear up dramatically. In conclusion, considering both views, good presentation, taste, and hygienic statements are the measurement issue to increased customers for imported eatables. I firmly restate that If people ensure their food staff with neat and clean, the balance of taste with freshness definitely grows up and success from this common issue and finally government considers taking any media campaign for encouraging their county people for buying local stuff with a limit of exorbitant.
It is true to say that the consumption of
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imported
groceries has grown up in recent years for their excellent alluring presentations.
However
, In my opinion, I
firmly
believe that
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some
steps can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to encourage
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people
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
eat
locally
.

In
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many
countries,
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people
are doing this job with
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much
happiness and there are several reasons why they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
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imported
goodies for their menu as a meal
regularly
.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, the marketing policy is
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much
attractive and appearing for appetizing such as
Possible spelling mistake. 'colourful' is British English.
colourful
wrapping packet with expired date signal for alarming
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people
for harmful and not encourage
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
eat
.
Besides
, it is easy to
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eat
and
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much
available in signed places and this food has tasty
obviously
and sizeable
as well
.
For example
, The Sunday Times recently published news that 69% of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
in the UK
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
pocketing
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imported
meals
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of their limited time and tasty
Possible spelling mistake. 'flavours' is British English.
flavours
.

On the other hand
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
solutions to tackle this problem.
Initially
, a snack would be worth wrapping plastic to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
away from dust and flies which to attract customers and believes in buying and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
for hygienic in processing which leads to customers
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
much
confident to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
eat
.
Moreover
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
produce various kinds of peck by farmers, which contain nutrients and vitamins for local
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
and it
is made
to control outsider product for native
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
.
For instance
, when Japan made sure their native
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
eat
cooked by wrapping plastic with a hygienic majority of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
local mess
continuously
,
as a result
of the economy of Japan gear up
dramatically
.

In conclusion
, considering both views,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
presentation, taste, and hygienic statements are the measurement issue to increased customers for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
imported
eatables. I
firmly
restate that If
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
ensure their food staff with neat and clean, the balance of taste with freshness definitely grows up and success from this common issue and
finally
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
considers taking any media campaign for encouraging their county
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
for buying local stuff with a limit of exorbitant.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why do people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food? v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
338 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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