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In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.5

In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. v. 5
It is believed that a number of individuals in a lot of countries earn an obscene amount of money. A few people are in support, claiming that it favours the nation however, others want the authorities to cap the achievable income at a set limit. Whilst I understand that making a lot of cash is good for the economy because it encourages healthy competition amongst businesses, I do think that limiting how much salary these people make is a step in the right direction, given that it gives too much power to the most influential citizens. Extremely high salaries equals high revenue for the nation. When citizens of a country are successful, it automatically translates to riches – the economy flourishes, more individuals are motivated to join the work force and that equals development. A good example can be found in countries like Saudi Arabia, where the king's inner circle is the wealthiest hence, keeping ownership of his lands on a tight leash and through this he is able to control the affairs of his empire more efficiently; making them one of the richest countries in the world today. Although more money is available to a select few, does not mean every one acquires these benefits; on the contrary, creates a large gap between the upper and middle classes of the society, hereby automatically putting the greater part of the population in the lower class; causing problems as poverty, inflation, corruption and all round anarchy. All due to the fact, that too much money was given to a select group of individuals. In conclusion, I think setting a limit to the monthly or annual funds of the immensely rich will profit both the governing bodies and the populace by ensuring equal distribution of wealth.
It
is believed
that a number of individuals in
a lot of
countries
earn an obscene amount of money. A few
people
are in support, claiming that it
favours
the nation
however
, others want the authorities to cap the achievable income at a set limit. Whilst I understand that making
a lot of
cash is
good
for the economy
because
it encourages healthy competition amongst businesses, I do
think
that limiting how much salary these
people
make
is a step in the right direction,
given
that it gives too much power to the most influential citizens.

Extremely
high salaries equals high revenue for the nation. When citizens of a
country
are successful, it
automatically
translates to riches
the economy flourishes, more individuals
are motivated
to
join
the work force and that equals development. A
good
example can
be found
in
countries
like Saudi Arabia, where the king's inner circle is the wealthiest
hence
, keeping ownership of his lands on a tight leash and through this he is able to control the affairs of his empire more
efficiently
; making them one of the richest
countries
in the world
today
.

Although more money is available to a select few, does not mean every one acquires these benefits;
on the contrary
, creates a large gap between the upper and middle classes of the society, hereby
automatically
putting the greater part of the population in the lower
class
; causing problems as poverty, inflation, corruption and all round anarchy. All due to the fact, that too much money was
given
to a select group of individuals.

In conclusion
, I
think
setting a limit to the monthly or annual funds of the
immensely
rich will profit both the governing bodies and the populace by ensuring equal distribution of wealth.
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4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. v. 5

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294 words
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