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In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.19

In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. v. 19
For a few decades, since economic development has risen high in a certain level in many countries, a few people earn salaries much higher than others. In my opinion, it would have both advantages and disadvantages. In this essay, we look at them in brief with some examples. To begin with, after the second war, many countries have keen to increase their security and economy at a high level. Thus, they have been looking at the people in highly skilled and ready to give good pay. Thereby, many developments and inventions happened, the speed of communication was increased in unexpected level and peoples’ lifestyle also been changed. For instance, The New York Times recently conducted a survey that 5% of people amongst their citizens have been secured with well-paid due to their role inevitably needed for certain works. On the contrary, since a few people receiving good pay, it would create an ego amongst other people and the Government would introduce only a few schemes to people for their lifestyle developments. Consequently, it may take more time to reach a certain level in society and leads to agitation sometimes. Furthermore, only a few of the people show humility to others and others just crossing over the people. For instance, The Time of India recently stated the news that low paid people could not get home for rent since the home rent costs much high and good pay people ready to give any amount to hire. To conclude, the Government should be keen to derive the salary structure in some standards and also introduce many schemes to raise other people and come forward better in society.
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in
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earn salaries much higher than others. In my opinion, it would have both advantages and disadvantages. In this essay, we look at them
in brief
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some
examples.

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begin
with, after the second war,
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many
countries have keen to increase their security and economy at a high
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level
.
Thus
, they have been looking at the
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people
in
highly
skilled and ready to give
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good
pay. Thereby,
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many
developments and inventions happened, the speed of communication
was increased
in unexpected
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level
and
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peoples’
lifestyle
also
been
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changed
.
For instance
, The New York Times recently conducted a survey that 5% of
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people
amongst their citizens have
been secured
with well-paid due to their role
inevitably
needed for certain works.

On the contrary
, since a few
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people
receiving
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good
pay, it would create an ego amongst
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other
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people
and the
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Government
would introduce
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only
a few schemes to
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people
for their lifestyle developments.
Consequently
, it may take more time to reach a certain
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level
in society and leads to agitation
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sometimes
.
Furthermore
,
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only
a few of the
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people
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show
humility to others
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and others
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just
crossing over the
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people
.
For instance
, The Time of India recently stated the news that low paid
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people
could not
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get
home for rent since the home rent costs much high and
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good
pay
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people
ready to give any amount to hire.

To conclude
, the
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Government
should be keen to derive the salary structure in
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some
standards and
also
introduce
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many
schemes to raise
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other
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people
and
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come
forward better in society.
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IELTS essay In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. v. 19

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
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Task Achievement: 8.0
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