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In many countries, a few people earn very high salaries. Some people think that this is a positive thing for the country. Other people believe that governments should not allow salaries to be over a certain level. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion. v.3

In many countries, a few people earn very high salaries. Some people think that this is a positive thing for the country. Other people believe that governments should not allow salaries to be over a certain level. v. 3
Today's world, in some nation's income range is too wide that few are earning an extremely high remunerations. Some people believe that earning a high income is in favour of a nation while others think that this trend does more harm than good, hence the government should limit it up to a certain pay level. In this essay, I will discuss both views and outline my opinion on that. To begin with, people who are highly skilled and talented should be rewarded with higher pays as a recognition of their hard work. Authorities should take actions to retain these people, if not they are moving to other countries where they can earn well with their skills. For example, human capital flight is much high in Sri Lanka, many skilled engineers, doctors and scientists are migrating due to the low wages in Sri Lanka. Furthermore, high salaries are a sign of a country's wealth and it's encouraging others to work harder to achieve the same. On the other hand, the government should ensure that salary scale is reasonable that it does justice to the people for what they offer back to the state. If someone is getting paid unnecessarily for doing nothing, then the authority should take necessary actions to stop it immediately. For example, in some organizations, junior employees are doing all the heavy work with no support from their superiors, yet when it comes to the pay, minors are earning very little compared to their superiors. In addition, limiting high pays would bring equality in the salary scale. In conclusion, I believe that it is a must to keep salary levels high for the people who rightfully deserve it and it's the government's responsibility to scale it appropriately. If not, the country will lose most skilled and talented people due to this matter.
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Today
's world, in
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some
nation's income range is too wide
The verb 'are' is plural. Did you mean: "that few is"? Did you use a verb instead of a noun?
that few are
earning an
extremely
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high
remunerations.
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Some
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people
believe that earning a
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high
income is in
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favour
of a nation while others
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think
that this trend does more harm than
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good
,
hence
the
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government
should limit it up to a certain
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pay
level. In this essay, I will discuss both views and outline my opinion on that.

To
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begin
with,
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people
who are
highly
skilled and talented should
be rewarded
with higher
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pays
as a recognition of their
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hard
work. Authorities should take actions to retain these
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people
, if not they are moving to
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other
countries where they can earn well with their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.
For example
, human capital flight is much
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high
in Sri Lanka,
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many
skilled engineers, doctors and scientists are migrating due to the low wages in Sri Lanka.
Furthermore
,
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high
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salaries
are a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sign
of a country's wealth and it's encouraging others to work harder to achieve the same.

On the
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other
hand, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should ensure that
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salary
scale is reasonable that it does justice to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
for what they offer back to the state. If someone is getting paid
unnecessarily
for doing nothing, then the authority should take necessary actions to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
it immediately.
For example
, in
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some
organizations, junior employees are doing all the heavy work with no support from their superiors,
yet
when it
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comes
to the
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pay
, minors are earning
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very
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little
compared to their superiors.
In addition
, limiting
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high
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pays
would bring equality in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
salary
scale.

In conclusion
, I believe that it is a
After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use "must" or "have to" here.
must to
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keep
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salary
levels
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high
for the
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people
who
rightfully
deserve it and it's the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
's responsibility to scale it
appropriately
. If not, the country will lose most skilled and talented
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
due to this matter.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay In many countries, a few people earn very high salaries. Some people think that this is a positive thing for the country. Other people believe that governments should not allow salaries to be over a certain level. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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