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Advertising is influencing people more and more. Is this a positive or a negative trend? Give your own opinion and examples. v.10

Advertising is influencing people more and more. Is this a positive or a negative trend? Give your own opinion and examples. v. 10
We are constantly surrounded by advertising, from television commercials, radio advertisement or billboards to posters on the roads. People have different views about the effects of advertising on our lives. In my opinion, there are both positive and negative impacts of advertising. There are two main reasons why it could be argued that advertising has several benefits on our lives. Firstly, advertising plays an important role in the economy. Companies need to tell consumers about their products and services. Advertising informs us about the choices we have and the use of the products. For example, Kelling ' corn flakes has a variety of flavours for different ranges to offer for different age groups and now also for people want to lose weight, thus giving consumers different choice to select from. So, without advertising, we would have fewer choices. Secondly, advertising is a creative industry that employs many people, therefore providing job opportunities and income for many people. So, without advertising, there would be a higher unemployment rate. On the other hand, it is understandable why some people might think that advertising is a negative part of our life. One problem is that advertisers often aim their marketing at the younger age groups. Children, for instance, can easily be influenced by advertisements. So this puts pressure on their parents to buy them things by pestering and nagging. Another problem is that many advertisements manipulate people too badly. Capturing the minds of consumers is the main intention of the advertisements. Thus, by persuading people that buying a product will make them happier and with higher social status. In conclusion, there are convincing arguments both for and against advertising, but I believe there are both positive and negative aspects of advertising. And I recommended that Advertising should be regulated and advertisements which aimed at children should be controlled or even banned.
We are
constantly
surrounded by advertising, from television commercials, radio
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advertisement
or billboards to posters on the roads.
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People
have
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different
views about the effects of advertising on our
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lives
. In my opinion, there are both
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positive
and
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negative
impacts of advertising.

There are two main reasons why it could
be argued
that advertising has several benefits on our
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lives
.
Firstly
, advertising plays an
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important
role in the economy.
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Companies
need to
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tell
consumers about their products and services. Advertising informs us about the choices we have and the
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use
of the products.
For example
,
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Kelling
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'
corn flakes has a variety of
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flavours
for
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different
ranges to offer for
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different
age groups and
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now
also
for
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people
want to lose weight,
thus
giving consumers
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different
choice to select from.
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So
, without advertising, we would have fewer choices.
Secondly
, advertising is a creative industry that employs
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many
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people
,
therefore
providing job opportunities and income for
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many
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people
.
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So
, without advertising, there would be a higher unemployment rate.

On the other hand
, it is understandable why
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some
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people
might
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think
that advertising is a
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negative
part of our life. One problem is that advertisers
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often
aim their marketing at the younger age groups. Children,
for instance
, can
easily
be influenced
by
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advertisements
.
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So
this puts pressure on their parents to
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buy
them things by pestering and nagging. Another problem is that
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many
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advertisements
manipulate
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people
too
badly
. Capturing the minds of consumers is the main intention of the
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advertisements
.
Thus
, by persuading
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people
that buying a product will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them happier and with higher social status.

In conclusion
, there are convincing arguments both for and against advertising,
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but
I believe there are both
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positive
and
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negative
aspects of advertising. And I recommended that Advertising should
be regulated
and
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advertisements
which aimed at children should
be controlled
or even banned.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Advertising is influencing people more and more. Is this a positive or a negative trend? Give your own opinion and examples. v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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