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In future, natural resource such as coal and oil will be used up. How can we reduce their depletion. What are the alternative sources of energy available? v.1

In future, natural resource such as coal and oil will be used up. How can we reduce their depletion. What are the alternative sources of energy available? v. 1
This truth is universally acknowledged fact that there is a drastic change in each and every field just due to the rapid advancement in technology. The usage of natural resources will be boomed up to great extent if this trend will be continued in future. However, we can decline it by researching other energy sources. These points of view will be discussed in the forthcoming paragraphs. It has always been regarded that the utilization of natural resources can decline by taking various steps. For instance, public transport, according to the recent survey of the Times of Japan, the consumption of petrol and Diesel is slumped by providing efficient public transport. So, most of the individuals use buses, trains, street cars to reach at their destination. In addition, people should not use such resource if they have other choice to complete their work. Therefore, it is crystallized that we can reduce their consumption to some extent by following aforesaid measures. However, there are another numerous sources of energy available for people such as, solar energy, wind power, Bio-gas and so on. To paraphrase, we can use the water to produce electricity rather than coal. Inclusively, government should impose some strict rules for three R' vial to energy conservation such as reduce use, recycle and re use. What is more, Hydrogen fuel cell technology is the latest invention in this contemporary era. Laconically, it is certainly true that government should come forward and provide support to researcher so that they can find some more reliable source in a foreseeable future.
This truth is
universally
acknowledged fact that there is a drastic
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
in each and every field
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just
due to the rapid advancement in technology. The usage of natural resources will
be boomed
up to great extent if this trend will
be continued
Did you mean: "in the future"?
in future
.
However
, we can decline it by researching other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
sources. These points of view will
be discussed
in the forthcoming paragraphs.

It has always
been regarded
that the utilization of natural resources can decline by taking various steps.
For instance
, public transport, according to the recent survey of the Times of Japan, the consumption of petrol and Diesel
is slumped
by providing efficient public transport.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, most of the individuals
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
buses, trains, street cars to reach at their destination.
In addition
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
should not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
such resource if they have other choice to complete their work.
Therefore
, it
is crystallized
that we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
their consumption to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
extent by following aforesaid measures.

However
, there are another numerous sources of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
available for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
such as, solar
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
, wind power, Bio-gas and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
on. To paraphrase, we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
the water to produce electricity
rather
than coal.
Inclusively
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should impose
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
strict
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
for three
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R&
#039; vial to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
conservation such as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
, recycle and re
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
.
What is more
, Hydrogen fuel cell technology is the latest invention in this contemporary era.

Laconically
, it is
certainly
true that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
forward and provide support to researcher
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that they can find
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
more reliable source in a foreseeable future.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay In future, natural resource such as coal and oil will be used up. How can we reduce their depletion. What are the alternative sources of energy available? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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