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In conclusion, although many reasons such as the use of plastic packaging materials and over consumerism contribute towards the increase in waste production, the government can reduce this growing problem by implementing stringent laws and by promoting recycling. v.1

In conclusion, although many reasons such as the use of plastic packaging materials and over consumerism contribute towards the increase in waste production, the government can reduce this growing problem by implementing stringent laws and by promoting recycling. v. 1
Excessive production of waste is an issue we face today. In order to tackle this menace it is important to identify its cause. Consumerism is the number one cause of the excessive production of garbage. Markets are getting flooded with cheap low quality products. They don’t last very long. People buy them, use them for a few weeks or months and then throw them away. Eventually, these end up in landfills. Growing consumerism is also responsible for mindless shopping. People buy products they do not even need and once those products start collecting dust, they are also thrown away. Many of these products cannot even be recycled. Consequently, they lie in the landfills polluting the environment. Excessive use of plastic also contributes to the growing production of rubbish. We go shopping empty handed and bring home the purchase in plastic carry bags. Food is often served on plastic plates during community celebrations and functions. Some even restaurants use plastic cutlery. E-waste is another problem that confronts us today. People no longer get a broken television or mobile phone repaired. Instead they buy a brand new piece. Some people discard their smart phones or laptops in working condition as soon as a new model hits the market. They are neither concerned, nor aware of the impact of their actions on the environment. In order to deal with the growing production of garbage, the government should enact some stringent laws. It should make recycling mandatory. It should also ban the use of plastic and impose heavy taxes on consumer goods like mobile phones to reduce their sales. Another way the government can fight this menace is to create awareness among the public. If people realize that they are knowingly or unknowingly hurting the planet by throwing away stuff, they will definitely want to change their habits.
Excessive
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production
of waste is an issue we face
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today
. In order to tackle this menace it is
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important
to identify its cause.

Consumerism is the number one cause of the excessive
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
production
of garbage. Markets are getting flooded with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cheap
low quality
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products
. They don’t last
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
long.
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People
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
them,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
them for a few weeks or months and then throw them away.
Eventually
, these
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
up in landfills. Growing consumerism is
also
responsible for mindless shopping.
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People
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
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products
they do not even need and once those
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products
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
collecting dust, they are
also
thrown away.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
of these
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products
cannot even
be recycled
.
Consequently
, they lie in the landfills polluting the environment.

Excessive
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use
of
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plastic
also
contributes to the growing
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production
of rubbish. We go shopping
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empty handed
and bring home the
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purchase
in
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plastic
carry bags. Food is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
served on
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plastic
plates during community celebrations and functions.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
even restaurants
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plastic
cutlery. E-waste is another problem that confronts us
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
.
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People
no longer
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a broken television or mobile phone repaired.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Instead
they
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buy
a
'brand new' seems to be a compound adjective in front of a noun. Use a hyphen: "brand-new".
brand new
piece.
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Some
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people
discard their smart phones or laptops in working condition as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as a new model hits the market. They are neither concerned, nor aware of the impact of their actions on the environment.

In order to deal with the growing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
production
of garbage, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should enact
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
stringent laws. It should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
recycling mandatory. It should
also
ban the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plastic
and impose heavy taxes on consumer
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
like mobile phones to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
their sales. Another way the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can fight this menace is to create awareness among the public. If
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
realize that they are
knowingly
or
unknowingly
hurting the planet by throwing away stuff, they will definitely want to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
their habits.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay In conclusion, although many reasons such as the use of plastic packaging materials and over consumerism contribute towards the increase in waste production, the government can reduce this growing problem by implementing stringent laws and by promoting recycling. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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