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An increase in the recycling material such as paper, cans and plastic has been noticed worldwide. Why do you think is this happening? What can be done to encourage recycling among people? v.1

An increase in the recycling material such as paper, cans and plastic has been noticed worldwide. Why do you think is this happening? What can be done to encourage recycling among people? v. 1
It is the 21st century. This is a modern epoch and in this epoch, there are many challenges being faced by the human. This is particularity true in the case of an increase in the waste material such as plastic, cans and paper create a hindrance in the whole world. Nowadays, many people are aware of recycling which help to curb this problem by reused the material. I will discuss, why this is happening, what we can do to resolve this issue and finally how people can be encouraged for recycling before drawing a logical conclusion. To begin with, in my perspective, the first and foremost point about creeping the recycling is trash into cash. It means that waste products are sold by people for some cash, which helps to lead the recycling. For instance, in Japan, many people sell the waste product such as empty cans or useless plastic to workers, who collect the waste material for recycling.   Moreover, some people are aware of recycling, which helps to curb or tackle the problem, which is created by a non-biodegradable product such as plastic. Secondly, there are various ways to encourage the people about recycling such as awareness, which is an incredible way to encourage people. The government should spread the awareness about recycling to people by advertising.   They should show the advertisement on television, magazine and newspaper because the majority of people can easily notice the issue by such media. As evidence, in Canada, the advertisement about recycling is shown on television or newspaper by the government once in a year, which helps to increase awareness among people. To sum up, after looking at above paragraphs, it is believed that the government should alert the people by advertising.
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many
challenges
being faced
by the human. This is particularity true in the case of an increase in the
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waste
material such as plastic,
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cans
and paper create a hindrance in the whole world. Nowadays,
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many
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people
are aware of
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recycling
which
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help
to curb this problem by reused the material. I will discuss, why this is happening, what we
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can
do to resolve this issue and
finally
how
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people
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can
be encouraged
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recycling
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before
drawing a logical conclusion.

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begin
with, in my perspective, the
first
and foremost point about creeping the
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recycling
is trash into cash. It means that
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waste
products
are sold
by
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people
for
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some
cash, which
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helps
to lead the
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recycling
.
For instance
, in Japan,
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many
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people
sell the
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waste
product such as empty
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cans
or useless plastic to workers, who collect the
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waste
material for
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recycling
.
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Moreover
,
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people
are aware of
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recycling
, which
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helps
to curb or tackle the problem, which
is created
by a non-biodegradable product such as plastic.

Secondly
, there are various ways to encourage the
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people
about
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recycling
such as awareness, which is an incredible way to encourage
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people
. The
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government
should spread the awareness about
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recycling
to
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people
by advertising.
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They should
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show
the advertisement on television, magazine and newspaper
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because
the majority of
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people
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can
easily
notice the issue by such media. As evidence, in Canada, the advertisement about
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recycling
is shown
on television or newspaper by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
once in a year, which
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helps
to increase awareness among
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people
.

To sum up, after looking at above paragraphs, it
is believed
that the
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government
should alert the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
by advertising.
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32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay An increase in the recycling material such as paper, cans and plastic has been noticed worldwide. Why do you think is this happening? What can be done to encourage recycling among people? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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