Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

In companies promotions to high positions should be given to employees inside the company and not to somebody outside the company or new hiring Do you agree or disagree with this view v.4

In companies promotions to high positions should be given to employees inside the company and not to somebody outside the company or new hiring with this view v. 4
Today every organization complete to become the top performer. To achieve this, they require the best person to run the company. Few people say that to fill the top position in an organization it' s better to hire a new talent from outside whereas, other few people argue that in-house employees are best to do this job. I agree that an inside employee will be a better option than an outsider. Firstly, it is important for higher level position employee to know what talent his colleague brings to the firm. This knowledge can be ascertained only if the person had previously worked with those staffs. In fact, this can help him to decide who is the best person to head each department. For example, when Sundar Pichai became the CEO of Google his first task was to restructure his department heads. Since he was already employed with Google in you who had the best of talent among all employees. In order to work as a team, it is important to know what talent their subordinates have. Secondly, every company has a different work culture. A new employee takes time to adapt to the new work culture and other aspects of an organization. Whereas, an in-house employee is already accustomed to the company policies and culture. Even the best of talents fail to perform when their work environment changes. For example, Nokia had hired a new CEO who had tons of experience and great talent. Even though he was the best of talents he could not adjust to the new work culture and had resigned immediately. In such a scenario, if an insider was selected to this post such complications could have been avoided since he is fully aware of companies’ culture and policies. To conclude, recruiting an individual for the top position is an imperative decision. Each company has different culture and talents, an internal staff would be aware of these and will handle the responsibilities better.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Today
every organization complete to become the top performer. To achieve this, they require the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
best
person to run the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
. Few
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
say that to fill the top position in an organization
Possible spelling mistake found.
it&
#039; s better to hire a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
talent
from outside whereas, other few
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
argue that in-
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employees
are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
best
to do this job. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
that an inside
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employee
will be a better option than an outsider.

Firstly
, it is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
for higher level position
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employee
to know what
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
talent
his colleague brings to the firm. This knowledge can
be ascertained
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
if the person had previously worked with those staffs. In fact, this can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
him to decide who is the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
best
person to head each department.
For example
, when
Possible spelling mistake found.
Sundar
Possible spelling mistake found.
Pichai
became the CEO of Google his
first
task was to restructure his department heads.
“Since” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Since
he was already employed with Google in you who had the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
best
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
talent
among all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employees
. In order to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
as a team, it is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
to know what
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
talent
their subordinates have.

Secondly
, every
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
has a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
culture
. A
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employee
takes time to adapt to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
culture
and other aspects of an organization. Whereas, an in-
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employee
is already accustomed to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
policies and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
culture
. Even the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
best
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
talents
fail to perform when their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
environment
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
.
For example
, Nokia had hired a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
CEO who had tons of experience and great
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
talent
.
Even though
he was the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
best
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
talents
he could not adjust to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
culture
and had resigned immediately. In such a scenario, if an insider
was selected
to this post such complications could have
been avoided
since he is
fully
aware of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies’
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
culture
and policies.

To conclude
, recruiting an individual for the top position is an imperative decision. Each
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
culture
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
talents
, an internal staff would be aware of these and will handle the responsibilities better.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay In companies promotions to high positions should be given to employees inside the company and not to somebody outside the company or new hiring with this view v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
327 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts