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In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? v.33

In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? v. 33
A visible change of any human civilization is getting old. Every individual has to go through three stages of life child, youth and elder. While, young is not much dependent on anyone but the other two needs support. In this essay I will discuss some of my views on who should be responsible for the backing needed during the later stage of survival. When we were children our parents were there to support us. Same is expected from us when we are young and our parents are older in age. They need our support physically as well as mentally. Due to the work related commitments, Young people are not able to take responsibility of their parents. They are not able to give the attention which is required at a later stage. So, to overcome this issue, families are sending their parents to the home care, which has all necessary facilities including nursing. The family, which prefers this option should be solely responsible for the expenses. It is their responsibility to take care of their parents and their well-being. Furthermore, government should also try to provide some more retirement benefits to all private sector employees so that they can survive. In some cases, we have seen families abandon their parents, if authorities enhance some benefits, then these people does not depend on anyone and can live happily. For instance, a large section in Britain is working as private employees, which does not provide any lifelong retirement monthly wages. It only provides a little of retirement fund, which is virtually not enough to survive in today's era. In conclusion, we as a society, should encourage younger generation to take care of older people. They should be given due respect. Public authorities should also make sure that they make arrangements so that these people can live their life with dignity and peace.
A visible
change
of any human civilization is getting
old
. Every individual
has to
go through three stages of life child, youth and elder. While, young is not much dependent on anyone
but
the other two needs support. In this essay I will discuss
some
of my views on who should be responsible for the backing needed during the later stage of survival.

When
we were children our
parents
were there to support us. Same is
expected
from us when we are young and our
parents
are older in age. They need our support
physically
as well
as mentally. Due to the work related commitments, Young
people
are not able to take responsibility of their
parents
. They are not able to give the attention which
is required
at a later stage.
So
, to overcome this issue, families are sending their
parents
to the home care, which has all necessary facilities including nursing. The family, which prefers this option should be
solely
responsible for the expenses. It is their responsibility to take care of their
parents
and their well-being.

Furthermore
,
government
should
also
try to provide
some
more retirement benefits to all private sector employees
so
that they can survive. In
some
cases, we have
seen
families abandon their
parents
, if authorities enhance
some
benefits, then these
people
does
not depend on anyone and can
live
happily
.
For instance
, a large section in Britain is working as private employees, which does not provide any lifelong retirement monthly wages. It
only
provides a
little
of retirement fund, which is
virtually
not
enough
to survive in
today
's era.

In conclusion
, we as a society, should encourage younger generation to take care of older
people
. They should be
given
due respect. Public authorities should
also
make
sure that they
make
arrangements
so
that these
people
can
live
their life with dignity and peace.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? v. 33

Essay
  American English
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309 words
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