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The role of a library in keeping books is obsolete. So universities should use digital media. What is your opinion? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages. v.1

The role of a library in keeping books is obsolete. So universities should use digital media. What is your opinion? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages. v. 1
Although such topics, in all likelihood, never will yield a consensual agreement, a constructive dialogue on keeping books in a library is becoming obsolete because of digital media can lead to thought-provoking discussions. My view is that irrespective of the numerous arguments that exist on either side, it is not a wise idea to move completely towards the digital media concept. Here in this essay I will explain the advantages and disadvantages of the above statement. There are a number of reasons in favour of my stance. To commence with, physical books are always available to read. It is important to note that this because it does not need an electronic device. For example, we can start reading a book by just going through the pages in that. Therefore, the aforementioned discussion shows that a physical book is easy to read. Another pivotal aspect of the argument is that an electronic device can only be used for this purpose when it is powered on. This is because it needs electric energy to make the content visible on the screen. For example, a smartphone, which can be used as a device to read the digital book will possibly turn off when the battery energy goes empty, and hence cannot be used to read books until it is charged again. This clearly indicates that an electronic device is not cent percent reliable. In conclusion, this essay discussed how much a physical book is useful when compared to a digital book. The equally potential evidence to support the arguments I have provided, underlines my opinion.
Although such topics, in all likelihood,
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never will yield
a consensual agreement, a constructive dialogue on keeping
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books
in a library is becoming obsolete
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because
of digital media can lead to
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thought
-provoking discussions. My view is that irrespective of the numerous arguments that exist on either side, it is not a wise
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idea
to
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move
completely towards the digital media concept. Here in this essay I will
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explain
the advantages and disadvantages of the above statement.

There are a number of reasons in
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favour
of my stance. To commence with, physical
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books
are always available to read. It is
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important
to note that this
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because
it does not need an electronic
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device
.
For example
, we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
reading a
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book
by
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just
going through the pages in that.
Therefore
, the aforementioned discussion
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shows
that a physical
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book
is easy to read.

Another pivotal aspect of the argument is that an electronic
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device
can
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only
be
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used
for this purpose when it
is powered
on. This is
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because
it needs electric energy to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the content visible on the screen.
For example
, a smartphone, which can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
as a
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device
to read the digital
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book
will
possibly
turn off when the battery energy goes empty, and
hence
cannot be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to read
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books
until it
is charged
again. This
clearly
indicates that an electronic
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device
is not cent percent reliable.

In conclusion
, this essay discussed how much a physical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
is useful when compared to a digital
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
. The
equally
potential evidence to support the arguments I have provided, underlines my opinion.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The role of a library in keeping books is obsolete. So universities should use digital media. What is your opinion? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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