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In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? v.11

One of the most challenging problems of today’s society is the question who should be responsible for our old people. It’s not only a financial problem but also a question of the system we want our society to have. In my essay I would like to consider different models. Firstly, the company can be responsible for their retired employees. For this reason a special fund could be established. The advantage of this model is, if you believe in the capitalist system, that it should be the cheapest solution. A possible problem is that the companies might have competition disadvantage due to higher staff costs. A second solution is that the government has to have the responsibility for the old people’s case. It can finace this with its tax incomes. Actually, this is the most democratic model since everybody gets as much money as he or she needs. Unfortunately, as the present situation in our society shows, this solution seems not to work very well. The government can no longer afford supporting all the old peoples. Another way of solving this problem is to give such the responsibility to the individual that means that everybody has to save money during their working life for the time after their retirement. This seems to be not a very fair model because there will certainly exist people who can’t afford to save part of their salary. In this case the government would have to save for them. A last solution is to go back to the old model of “the big family” who cares for all their members. I don’t think this is possible in our day’s society because the family structures have so much changed. To sum up, I have to admit that I can’t find a really good solution for this problem all models have advantages and disadvantages. Certainly we have to think about this topic much more in the future.
One of the most challenging
problems
of
today
’s
society
is the question who should be responsible for our
old
people
. It’s not
only
a financial
problem
but
also
a question of the system we want our
society
to have. In my essay I would like to consider
different
models.

Firstly
, the
company
can be responsible for their retired employees.
For this reason
a special fund could
be established
. The advantage of this
model
is, if you believe in the capitalist system, that it should be the cheapest
solution
. A possible
problem
is that the
companies
might have competition disadvantage due to higher staff costs.

A second
solution
is that the
government
has to
have the responsibility for the
old
people
’s case. It can finace this with its tax incomes. Actually, this is the most democratic
model
since everybody
gets
as much money as he or she needs. Unfortunately, as the present situation in our
society
shows
, this
solution
seems not to work
very
well. The
government
can no longer afford supporting all the
old
peoples.

Another way of solving this
problem
is to give such the responsibility to the individual that means that everybody
has to
save money during their working life for the time after their retirement. This seems to be not a
very
fair
model
because
there will
certainly
exist
people
who can’t afford to save part of their salary.
In this case
the
government
would
have to
save for them.

A last
solution
is to go back to the
old
model
of “the
big
family” who cares for all their members. I don’t
think
this is possible in our day’s
society
because
the family structures have
so
much
changed
. To sum up, I
have to
admit that I can’t find a
really
good
solution
for this
problem
all
models
have advantages and disadvantages.
Certainly
we
have to
think
about this topic much more in the future.
What do you think?
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IELTS essay In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family?

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