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In a number of countries, some people think it s necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.1

In a number of countries, some people think it s necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. v. 1
High-speed intercity trains are now a common sight in Europe, China, and Japan. Due to the success of these rail networks, a rising number of people believe that constructing new railway lines of this type is a necessity. Conversely, there is a sizeable group who holds the view that the money would be better invested in upgrading existing public transport infrastructure. Those in favour of connecting cities via high-speed trains believe that a modern society needs an advanced transport system that is also affordable. In other words, these transport systems allow people to travel quickly and cheaply, which is desirable in terms of economic growth and social connection. To be precise, by reducing the cost and travel time, people will be more able to conduct business and visit relatives than they have in the past when they needed to be able to afford a plane ticket or endure a long and uncomfortable journey by bus or slow train. Nevertheless, opponents argue that already-existing public transport should be improved before embarking on a high-speed rail project. This is mainly due to the fact that day-to-day public transport is a more immediate problem. Old buses pollute the city air with thick, acrid smoke, while their degraded condition makes people unwilling to ride them, and this only exacerbates the problem of traffic congestion and air pollution in major cities. Therefore, this issue should be fixed before any large-scale nationwide project is undertaken. Overall, while having cities connected by a modern high-speed rail network is a positive thing that brings many benefits, improving public transportation as it exists today should be the priority as this will have a more immediate and measurable benefit for people’s lives.
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High-speed
intercity trains are
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now
a common sight in Europe, China, and Japan. Due to the success of these rail networks, a rising number of
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people
believe that constructing new railway lines of this type is a necessity.
Conversely
, there is a sizeable group who holds the view that the money would be better invested in upgrading existing
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public
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transport
infrastructure.

Those in
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favour
of connecting
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cities
via
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high-speed
trains believe that a modern society needs an advanced
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transport
system
that is
also
affordable.
In other words
, these
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transport
systems
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allow
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people
to travel
quickly
and
cheaply
, which is desirable in terms of economic growth and social connection. To be precise, by reducing the cost and travel time,
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people
will be more able to conduct business and visit relatives than they have in the past when they needed to be able to afford a
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plane
ticket or endure a long and uncomfortable journey by bus or slow train.

Nevertheless
, opponents argue that already-existing
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public
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transport
should be
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improved
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before
embarking on a
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high-speed
rail project. This is
mainly
due to the fact that day-to-day
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public
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transport
is a more immediate problem.
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Old
buses pollute the city air with thick, acrid smoke, while their degraded condition
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makes
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people
unwilling to ride them, and this
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only
exacerbates the problem of traffic congestion and air pollution in major
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cities
.
Therefore
, this issue should be
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fixed
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before
any large-scale nationwide project is undertaken.

Overall
, while having
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cities
connected by a modern
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high-speed
rail network is a
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positive
thing that brings
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many
benefits, improving
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public
transportation as it exists
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today
should be the priority as this will have a more immediate and measurable benefit for
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people’s
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In a number of countries, some people think it s necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. v. 1

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4 paragraphs
282 words
6.5
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