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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to to spend large sums of money on constructing railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.1

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to to spend large sums of money on constructing railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. v. 1
Transportation plays a key role in the development of a country’s economy. As such, it is not surprising that some individuals believe the significance of creating new lines between cities and upgrading the transports that are being used now. Nonetheless, it is known by all that both these points require a huge sum of money. This essay will focus on the idea that these two do not have differences in their effects. Constructing new railway lines can experience drawbacks other than finance. One is location and/or space where the new road will be built. It should be considered that creating new lines needs a wide enough space and there is a high probability that areas, like farms and other open spaces, can be used and may be destroyed for these projects. However, paving for new rails can result in a faster transaction of businesses, both big and small, between urban and rural areas. As a result, commerce and even tourism can boom. As for spending money on modernizing prevailing public transports, certain downsides are identified. For instance, it is quite complicated to totally upgrade most public transports easily. Authorities should think about the total number of transports that needs improvements. Moreover, levelling up these vehicles does not necessarily mean that it can reduce the stress of traffic jam. Despite that, having a bigger and better means of transport can provide convenience to daily projects commuters. To conclude, these projects thrive on the budget allocated by a government from the tax collected from the citizens of that nation. Even so, it is important to note that these views are inevitable, but they share the same goal and that is to provide convenience both to locals and businesses alike.
Transportation plays a key role in the development of a country’s economy. As such, it is not surprising that
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some
individuals believe the significance of creating
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new
lines between cities and upgrading the
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transports
that are being
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used
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now
. Nonetheless, it
is known
by all that both these points require a huge sum of money. This essay will focus on the
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idea
that these two do not have differences in their effects.

Constructing
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new
railway lines can experience drawbacks other than finance. One is location and/or space where the
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new
road will
be built
. It should
be considered
that creating
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new
lines needs a wide
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enough
space and there is a high probability that areas, like farms and other open spaces, can be
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used
and may be
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destroyed
for these projects.
However
, paving for
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new
rails can result in a faster transaction of businesses, both
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big
and
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small
, between urban and rural areas.
As a result
, commerce and even tourism can boom.

As for spending money on modernizing prevailing public
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transports
, certain downsides
are identified
.
For instance
, it is quite complicated to
totally
upgrade most public
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transports
easily
. Authorities should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
about the total number of
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transports
that needs improvements.
Moreover
, levelling up these vehicles does not
necessarily
mean that it can
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reduce
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
of traffic jam. Despite that, having a bigger and better means of
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transport
can provide convenience to daily projects commuters.

To conclude
, these projects thrive on the budget allocated by a
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government
from the tax collected from the citizens of that nation. Even
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so
, it is
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important
to note that these views are inevitable,
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but
they share the same goal and
that is
to provide convenience both to locals and businesses alike.
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IELTS essay In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to to spend large sums of money on constructing railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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