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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. v.1

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. v. 1
As nations build rapid rail networks connecting their cities, some people argue the money should rather be spent on improving existing public transportation systems. While there are merits in both the arguments, tight budget allocation for infrastructure projects compels many nations to choose either of them. One prime reason behind constructing fast train networks is to avoid overcrowding of cities. Consequently, this enables people to live comfortably in their hometown, in their own house, along with their family; and take the train to cities for their work every day, spending the least amount of time travelling. Furthermore, this arrangement boosts the rural economy and enhances the mental wellbeing of citizens by keeping families together. Thanks to its mass transportation network, Singapore is a phenomenal example where the masses do not need to live in rented houses closer to cities, but rather in their own homes far away. On the contrary, being mammoth and long-running, fast train network projects deny time and funding to maintain existing public transportation systems. As the majority of a nation’s citizens rely on existing public transport systems for their travelling needs, it is of paramount importance to maintain and constantly upgrade them. Sri Lanka is a prime example of how futuristic, ambitious bullet train projects have ended up crippling the maintenance of the present transportation systems, as the island nation’s government grapples for funding, having spent all the fortune on its ambitious projects. I strongly believe, while acknowledging the merits of both the arguments, the foremost importance should be given to keep the existing roads and rail networks in working conditions, as they keep the wheels of the economy moving; nevertheless, additional funding should be sought to launch futuristic transportation projects. Securing whatever it already has, a nation can then confidently take bolder steps into the future.
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build rapid rail
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connecting their
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some
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people
argue the money should
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existing
public
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transportation
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systems
. While there are merits in both the arguments, tight budget allocation for infrastructure
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projects
compels
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nations
to choose either of them.

One prime reason behind constructing
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fast
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train
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networks
is to avoid overcrowding of
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cities
.
Consequently
, this enables
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people
to
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live
comfortably
in their hometown, in their
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own
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house
, along with their family; and take the
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train
to
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cities
for their work every day, spending the least amount of time travelling.
Furthermore
, this arrangement boosts the rural economy and enhances the mental
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wellbeing
of citizens by keeping families together. Thanks to its mass
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transportation
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network
, Singapore is a phenomenal example where the masses do not need to
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live
in rented
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houses
closer to
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cities
,
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in their
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own
homes far away.

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, being mammoth and long-running,
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fast
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train
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network
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projects
deny time and funding to maintain
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existing
public
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transportation
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systems
. As the majority of a
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nation’s
citizens rely on
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existing
public transport
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systems
for their travelling needs, it is of paramount importance to maintain and
constantly
upgrade them. Sri Lanka is a prime example of how futuristic, ambitious bullet
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train
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projects
have ended up crippling the maintenance of the present
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transportation
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systems
, as the island
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nation’s
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government
grapples for funding, having spent all the fortune on its ambitious projects.

I
strongly
believe, while acknowledging the merits of both the arguments, the foremost importance should be
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given
to
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keep
the
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existing
roads and rail
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networks
in working conditions, as they
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keep
the wheels of the economy moving;
nevertheless
, additional funding should
be sought
to launch futuristic
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transportation
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projects
. Securing whatever it already has, a
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nation
can then
confidently
take bolder steps into the future.
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IELTS essay In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. v. 1

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