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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. v.44

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. v. 44
People, in some countries, prefer to have a fast and extensive rail communication while others think that improving the existing road transportation system is far more important and that is why more budget should be spent on roads. This essay discusses both views and includes my opinion before drawing a reasonable conclusion. On the one hand, people in favour of having a speedy and reliable train communication system mainly base their ground on the fact that trains can carry a great number of passengers and goods at a time and can remarkably reduce the traffic congestion. Rail communication is safer, faster and can connect cities and towns that build a better communication system than the conventional road transport system, according to these people. Furthermore, locomotives are already famous in many countries and have greatly improved communications there. Due to such advantages, people often opine that more money should be allocated for constructing new train lines. For instance, train system in China has a groundbreaking contribution to improving its overall communication system and many countries have started adopting this model. On the other hand, public transport system plays an essential role for interconnecting the different parts of the cities and the highest percentage of people use this system to travel to different places. Though trains can improve the city transport facilities, it is not an alternative to the existing road transports. That is why many people believe that national budget should be utilised on improving the public transport for the sake of the better communication for mass people. For instance, train line in the UK has always contributed to a great extent to the overall transport system in the country. Nevertheless, the public transport has always been the main commuting mode for the UK citizens. To conclude, I personally believe that, the national budget should be fairly distributed both for the improvement of the rail and public transports for the overall expansion and improvement of the transportation system.
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fast
and extensive rail
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communication
while others
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think
that improving the existing
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road
transportation
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is far more
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important
and
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why more budget should
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on
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roads
. This essay discusses both views and includes my opinion
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before
drawing a reasonable conclusion.

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people
in
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favour
of having a speedy and reliable
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train
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communication
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system
mainly
base their ground on the fact that
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trains
can carry a great number of passengers and
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goods
at a time and can
remarkably
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reduce
the traffic congestion. Rail
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communication
is safer, faster and can connect cities and towns that build a better
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communication
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system
than the conventional
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road
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transport
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system
, according to these
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people
.
Furthermore
, locomotives are already
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famous
in
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many
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countries
and have
greatly
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improved
communications there. Due to such advantages,
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people
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often
opine that more money should
be allocated
for constructing new
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train
lines.
For instance
,
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train
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system
in China has a groundbreaking contribution to improving its
overall
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communication
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system
and
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many
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countries
have
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started
adopting this model.

On the other hand
,
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public
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transport
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system
plays an essential role for interconnecting the
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different
parts of the cities and the highest percentage of
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people
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use
this
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system
to travel to
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different
places. Though
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trains
can
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improve
the city
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transport
facilities, it is not an alternative to the existing
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road
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transports
.
That is
why
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many
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people
believe that national budget should be
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utilised
on improving the
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public
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transport
for the sake of the better
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communication
for mass
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people
.
For instance
,
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train
line in the UK has always contributed to a great extent to the
overall
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transport
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system
in the
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country
.
Nevertheless
, the
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public
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transport
has always been the main commuting mode for the UK citizens.

To conclude
, I
personally
believe that, the national budget should be
fairly
distributed both for the improvement of the rail and
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public
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transports
for the
overall
expansion and improvement of the transportation
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system
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
49Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. v. 44

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
327 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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