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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Write at least 250 words. v.40

Although it is sometimes thought that substantial amount of money ought to be spent to develop a new railway to provide high-speed transportation between cities, other people believe that the allocation should be utilized on enhancing current public transport. In my opinion, I consider that the money has to be used to upgrade the existing transport rather than building a new railway. On the other hand, some people believe that money should be spent to increase the quality of public transport in providing better services and I agree. In other words, improving the public service allows more society to opted to utilize the service and as the result government income will be growth and the money can be used to build and improve other public services. For example, the typical problem for a railway is the delivery, which commonly delays for more than 15 minutes. Hence, increasing the speed of the arrival time will absolutely enhance the quality of public transport. Furthermore, improving public transport is vital to ensure the first transport for the people to choose is transport prepare by the government which directly able to reduce traffics overwhelmed. Aside from that, it is often believed that it is better if the money allocated to develop a new railway line to deliver high-speed trains between cities. This to ensure the travel time is minimal for those people that travelling between cities. For instance, people who work in different cities able to arrive at their workplace on time. Without executing this project, people have to manage their time wisely in going to other cities. Another reason is that due to technology constraint as the old railway might not be able to sustain pressure produce by the train. Hence, building the new railway is an accurate action in assuring the safety of the passenger. In conclusion, while many people may vary in their opinions, I think that is better to increase the existing public transport to maximize government income and fulfil people satisfaction in using public transport.
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that substantial amount of
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to develop a
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railway
to provide high-speed transportation between
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cities
,
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people
believe that the allocation should
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on enhancing
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current
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public
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transport
. In my opinion, I consider that the
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money
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has to
be
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used
to upgrade the existing
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transport
rather
than building a
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new
railway.

On the
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other
hand,
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some
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people
believe that
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money
should
be spent
to increase the quality of
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public
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transport
in providing better
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services
and I
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. In
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words, improving the
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public
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service
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allows
more society to
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opted
to utilize the
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service
and as the result
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government
income will be growth and the
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money
can be
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used
to build and
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improve
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other
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public
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services
.
For example
, the typical problem for a
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railway
is the delivery, which
commonly
delays for more than 15 minutes.
Hence
, increasing the speed of the arrival
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time
will
absolutely
enhance the quality of
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public
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transport
.
Furthermore
, improving
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public
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transport
is vital to ensure the
first
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transport
for the
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people
to choose is
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transport
prepare by the
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government
which
directly
able to
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reduce
traffics overwhelmed.

Aside from that, it is
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often
believed that it is better if the
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money
allocated to develop a
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new
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railway
line to deliver high-speed trains between
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cities
. This to ensure the travel
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time
is minimal for those
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people
that travelling between
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cities
.
For instance
,
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people
who work in
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different
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cities
able to arrive at their workplace on
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time
. Without executing this project,
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people
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have to
manage their
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time
wisely
in going to
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other
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cities
. Another reason is that due to technology constraint as the
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old
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railway
might not be able to sustain pressure produce by the train.
Hence
, building the
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new
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railway
is an accurate action in assuring the safety of the passenger.

In conclusion
, while
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many
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people
may vary in their opinions, I
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think
that is
better to increase the existing
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public
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transport
to maximize
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government
income and fulfil
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people
satisfaction in using
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public
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transport
.
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IELTS essay In a number of countries, some people think that is it necessary to spend large sums of money on construction new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Other believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
336 words
6.5
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