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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.31

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. v. 31
Public transports have improved a lot in recent time. The quality, as well as quantity, has increased compared to the past. However, most people argue that while building a new transport network spending a massive amount of money is must although remaining disagree with the statement. To begin with, transport building cost will be lower. The initial cost of setting up price is high. Firstly, the country has to investigate the field. While searching for the different site procedure should be adopted as the study of soil, type of lands, and many more. After complete research, the transport network can be created with higher efficiency and with longer life. For example, the road was constructed in our village without other investigation, and after a few months, soil started to erode. After reconstruction and maintenance, the cost was estimated to be doubled as it was initially calculated even now its frequent renovation is required. On the other hand, the country's budget can be used for different development purposes. Developing the pre-existing network with the utilization of modern technology will be cost-efficient as well as lowers the country economic burden for developing countries like Nepal, India, butane, etc. The survey, conducted by The Himalayan Times, has published a comparison of a place where renovation of previously built network and newly constructed roads had a tremendous amount of difference in the economy of the country. The repaired way showed a positive trade of money with high earning and profit for the nation. In conclusion, the construction of a new type of transport system is fruitful, but the creation of roads which are previously available is foolish. In my opinion, the development of existing train or any other transport will make people easy as well as country secure.
Public
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transports
have
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improved
a lot in recent time. The quality,
as well
as quantity, has increased compared to the past.
However
, most
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people
argue that while building a new
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transport
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network
spending a massive amount of money is
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must
although remaining disagree with the statement.

To
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begin
with,
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transport
building cost will be
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lower
. The initial cost of setting up price is high.
Firstly
, the
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country
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
has to
investigate the field. While searching for the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
site procedure should
be adopted
as the study of soil, type of lands, and
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many
more. After complete research, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transport
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
network
can
be created
with higher efficiency and with longer life.
For example
, the road
was constructed
in our village without other investigation, and after a few months, soil
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
to erode. After reconstruction and maintenance, the cost
was estimated
to
be doubled
as it was
initially
calculated even
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
its frequent renovation
is required
.

On the other hand
, the country's budget can be
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used
for
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different
development purposes. Developing the pre-existing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
network
with the utilization of modern technology will
be cost
-efficient
as well
as lowers the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
economic burden for developing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
like Nepal, India, butane, etc. The survey, conducted by The Himalayan Times, has published a comparison of a place where renovation of previously built
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
network
and
newly
constructed roads had a tremendous amount of difference in the economy of the
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country
. The repaired way
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
a
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positive
trade of money with high earning and profit for the nation.

In conclusion
, the construction of a new type of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transport
system is fruitful,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the creation of roads which are previously available is foolish. In my opinion, the development of existing train or any other
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transport
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
easy
as well
as
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country
secure.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. v. 31

Essay
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4 paragraphs
294 words
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