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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. v.17

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. v. 17
For many people around the world, the preferred method of transportation is high-speed rail. Commuters travelling to and from work rely on the safety and efficiency, while tourist appreciate the convenience and novelty that trains provide. Others believe that highways, busses and regular trains should be improved before new, high-speed lines are added. Safety is chief among concerns for those who travel to work or school on a regular basis. If one drives a car, they have to concentrate on the road not only to avoid accidents but also to prevent other drivers from causing a problem on the road. High-speed rail allows the commuter to leave the driving to the professional controlling the train, allowing them to get some work done while getting to work safely. On the other hand, high-speed trains are expensive, and some believe this money could be spent on repairing motorways which are used by cars, busses and motorcycles. Another possibility would be to use this money to build more regular commuter trains and busses to service the ever-expanding urban populations. Moreover, books and ferries could benefit from a budget, which focuses more on existing forms of transport. In the end, public transport is an issue which affects us all. The taxes which we pay should be spent on the type of transport, which will have the most benefit to all citizens. In addition, we need to take into account how much the environment is damaged fossil fuels and pollution. Therefore, I believe in order to move forward, we need to embrace the idea of high-speed rail, so that future generations can continue to live safely and efficiently.
For
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many
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people
around the world, the preferred method of transportation is
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high-speed
rail. Commuters travelling to and from
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work
rely on the safety and efficiency, while tourist appreciate the convenience and novelty that
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trains
provide. Others believe that highways, busses and regular
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trains
should be
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improved
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before
new,
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high-speed
lines are
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added
.

Safety is chief among concerns for those who travel to
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work
or school on a regular basis. If one drives a car, they
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have to
concentrate on the road not
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only
to avoid accidents
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but
also
to
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prevent
other drivers from causing a problem on the road.
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High-speed
rail
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allows
the commuter to
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leave
the driving to the professional controlling the
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train
, allowing them to
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get
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some
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work
done while getting to
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work
safely
.

On the other hand
,
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high-speed
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trains
are expensive, and
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some
believe this money could
be spent
on repairing motorways which are
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used
by cars, busses and motorcycles.
Another possibility
would be to
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use
this money to build more regular commuter
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trains
and busses to service the ever-expanding urban populations.
Moreover
, books and ferries could benefit from a budget, which focuses more on existing forms of transport.

In the
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end
, public transport is an issue which affects us all. The taxes which we pay should
be spent
on the type of transport, which will have the most benefit to all citizens.
In addition
, we need to take into account how much the environment
is damaged
fossil fuels and pollution.
Therefore
, I believe in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
forward, we need to embrace the
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idea
of
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high-speed
rail,
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so
that future generations can continue to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
safely
and
efficiently
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. v. 17

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
6.5
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