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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Write at least 250 words. v.12

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. v. 12
Public transport is a very essential medium and had become an important part in every common man's life, and is becoming a good solution to avoid environmental issues. While, many think that Government should spend large sum of money in constructing new railway lines for running super fast trains between cities. I personally think that the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. This essay will discuss both these views, along with examples from Oxford university study and Time magazine survey to demonstrate the points and support the claims. On the one hand, people in a number of countries are bored of long journey, they don't want to spend more time in their travel. Therefore, they wants to commute fast between cities, and hence they foresee that their Government should construct new rail lines. For example, Oxford university in 2015 researched that 60% of the total population in UK prefer to travel by air than by road, to travel faster. So from this example, it is clear that people dislike spending time sitting idle for longer duration. On the other hand, some people contradict this thinking, by saying that, the money should be spent on improving existing public transportation. Additionally, they want to get to their present local transport a stable one, and secure as well. Similarly, a survey done by Time magazine in 2018 reveals that almost 80% of the US population expressed interest in enhancing the available commute system. So, from this example, it is clear that public prefers to stay secured rather than experience comfortness. To conclude, public transport helps reducing global warming, and any money spent by Government comes from the taxes paid by people. Hence, this should be spent in a meaningful way, should be helpful, and beneficial to them. Finally, the respective country officials should stabilize the existing system before stepping into a new system.
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is a
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essential medium and had become an
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part in every common
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man
's life, and is becoming a
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good
solution to avoid environmental issues. While,
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that
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Government
should spend large sum of
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money
in constructing new railway lines for running super
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fast
trains between cities. I
personally
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think
that the
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money
should be
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spent
on improving existing
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public
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. This essay will discuss both these views, along with
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examples
from Oxford university study and
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Time
magazine survey to demonstrate the points and support the claims.

On the one hand,
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people
in a number of countries are
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bored of
long journey, they don't want to spend more
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time
in their travel.
Therefore
, they
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wants
to commute
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fast
between cities, and
hence
they foresee that their
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Government
should construct new rail lines. For
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example
, Oxford university in 2015 researched that 60% of the total population in UK prefer to travel by air than by road, to travel faster.
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from this
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, it is
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clear
that
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people
dislike spending
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time
sitting idle for longer duration.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
contradict this thinking, by saying that, the
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money
should be
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spent
on improving existing
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public
transportation.
Additionally
, they want to
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get
to their present local
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a stable one, and secure
as well
.
Similarly
, a survey done by
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Time
magazine in 2018 reveals that almost 80% of the US population expressed interest in enhancing the available commute system.
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So
, from this
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example
, it is
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clear
that
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public
prefers to stay secured
rather
than experience
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comfortness
.

To conclude
,
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helps
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reducing
global warming, and any
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money
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spent
by
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Government
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comes
from the taxes paid by
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people
.
Hence
, this should be
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spent
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in a meaningful way
, should be helpful, and beneficial to them.
Finally
, the respective country officials should stabilize the existing system
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before
stepping into a new system.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS essay In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. v. 12

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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