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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.11

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. v. 11
It is considered by some people that spending money on building new railroads is a good idea while there are others who insist that it is better to use it for current public transport. In my opinion, I believe that money is essential for mending public transit because of the reasonable ticket and construction fee. To start with, it is possible to argue that a large amount of money should be spent on the installation of high-speed railway. Firstly, traveling by train is absolutely faster than public transport because it helps workers living far from their workplace commute easily. Take an example, it takes around one hour and a half to go from downtown of Hanoi to Vinh Phuc city by bus whereas just 30 minutes by train with the same distance. Besides, this rail transportation system can enhance the development of cities. Not only do humans travel faster but also goods will be shipped quickly. On the other hand, the idea that money is vital for public transportation is supported by a lot of people due to a number of positive effects. It is obvious that commuting by public means is affordable, so all classes can access and use this type of transportation. For instance, laborers with low salary could not afford to commute by trains every day since the ticket is quite costly while they have to spend money on a range of costs in their lives. Another point is that the government needs large sums of money to construct the train network. In other words, these kinds of projects have a history of costing far more than their original budgets. On the contrary, improving existing transportation for the public does not require too much financial resources. Therefore, the government can use the funds for a lot of other purposes like medicine and education. In conclusion, although it is true that there are various benefits when money is used for building rail systems, I think the government should spend this fund on current public transit.
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that spending
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money
on building new railroads is a
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good
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idea
while there are others who insist that it is better to
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use
it for
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current
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public
transport. In my opinion, I believe that
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money
is essential for mending
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public
transit
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because
of the reasonable ticket and construction fee.

To
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start
with, it is possible to argue that a large amount of
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money
should
be spent
on the installation of high-speed railway.
Firstly
, traveling by
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train
is
absolutely
faster than
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public
transport
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because
it
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helps
workers living far from their workplace commute
easily
. Take an example, it takes around one hour and a half to go from downtown of Hanoi to
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Vinh
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Phuc
city by bus whereas
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just
30 minutes by
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train
with the same distance.
Besides
, this rail
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transportation
system can enhance the development of cities. Not
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only
do humans travel faster
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but
also
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goods
will
be shipped
quickly
.

On the
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other
hand, the
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idea
that
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money
is vital for
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public
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transportation
is supported
by
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a lot of
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people
due to a number of
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positive
effects. It is obvious that commuting by
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public
means is affordable,
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so
all classes can access and
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use
this type of
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transportation
.
For instance
, laborers with low salary could not afford to commute by
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trains
every day since the ticket is quite costly while they
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have to
spend
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money
on a range of costs in their
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lives
. Another point is that the
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government
needs large sums of
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money
to construct the
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train
network. In
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other
words, these kinds of projects have a history of costing far more than their original budgets.
On the contrary
, improving existing
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transportation
for the
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public
does not require too much financial resources.
Therefore
, the
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government
can
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use
the funds for
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a lot of
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other
purposes like medicine and education.

In conclusion
, although it is true that there are various benefits when
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money
is
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used
for building rail systems, I
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think
the
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government
should spend this fund on
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current
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
transit.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
337 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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