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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe hat money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.1

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe hat money should be spent on improving existing public transport. v. 1
Nowadays, people travelling from one place to another comfortably with the help of transportation. while some people believe that investing money on manufacturing new railway tracks between cities to reach a destination quickly, others believe existing public transport should be improved by spending money on it. This essay will discuss why investing money on public transport would be better than spending on railways construction. To begin with, some individuals reckon that it would be beneficial if money would be spent on railway lines. It will save the time of most of the people, who want to go from one city to another in a few minutes. For example, trains are faster than public transport. Along with this, travelling by trains are cheaper than public transport. Therefore, it could be good for some people, but not for all. In contrast, other people think that, if money would be spent on public transport in order to to make better than existing transport. Although our existing public transport is good but not perfect, if this would become perfect, then it would easier for everyone to travel comfortably from one point to another point in the entire city without any problem. Buses and cabs are good examples of public transport. This decision of people, including myself, is better. In conclusion, travelling fast and comfortable is important. This essay discussed why spending money on railway lines is not a good idea, also this essay suggested improving existing public transport would be a better option of travelling.
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help
of transportation.
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while
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some
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people
believe that investing
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money
on manufacturing new
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railway
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tracks
between cities to reach a destination
quickly
, others believe
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existing
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public
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transport
should be
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improved
by spending
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money
on it. This essay will discuss why investing
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money
on
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public
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transport
would be better than spending on
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railways
construction.

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some
individuals reckon that it would be beneficial if
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money
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on
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railway
lines. It will save the time of most of the
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people
, who want to go from one city to another in a few minutes.
For example
, trains are faster than
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public
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transport
. Along with this,
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travelling
by trains are cheaper than
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public
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transport
.
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, it could be
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good
for
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some
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people
,
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not for all.

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, other
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people
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think
that, if
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money
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be spent
on
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public
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transport
in order
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make
better than
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existing
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transport
. Although our
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existing
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public
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transport
is
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good
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but
not perfect, if this would become perfect, then it would easier for everyone to travel
comfortably
from one point to another point in the entire city without any problem. Buses and cabs are
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good
examples of
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public
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transport
. This decision of
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people
, including myself, is better.

In conclusion
,
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travelling
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fast
and comfortable is
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important
. This essay discussed why spending
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money
on
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railway
lines is not a
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good
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,
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this essay suggested improving
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existing
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public
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transport
would be a better option of
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travelling
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
Language is the road map of a culture. It tells you where its people come from and where they are going.
Rita Mae Brown

IELTS essay In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe hat money should be spent on improving existing public transport. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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