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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sum of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Other believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sum of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Other believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. v. 1
Due to rapid urbanization, better means of travelling have become a major concern. On one hand, some people argue that spending heavy budgets on building fast railway infrastructures between cities is necessary; on the other hand, many people believe that the budget should be spent on improving the existing public transportation. This essay will discuss both views and provide my opinion. People, in some countries, favour fast and reliable railway transportation system. The facts behind this favouritism are that the trains carry more passengers and goods at the same time and reduce traffic congestion. Besides, trains are safer and faster trains can connect cities to build a better communication system. For instance, Japan and China have successfully constructed fast railway tracks around the country due to which their transportation system has become extremely strong and fast. Due to the above-mentioned facts, some people believe that a large amount of budget should be spent on a fast railway system between cities. However, many people think that budget money should be utilized to improve existing public transportation. Public transport systems play a crucial role in interconnecting the different parts of the cities. In addition, due to the increase in population, cities are constantly growing, and people tend to move further away from the city centre's, where the houses are big and affordable. A good public transportation system may help these people to commute easily within the city. For example, despite the fact that London is one of the busiest cities in the world, the underground railway system has made the commuting within the city more reliable and quick. Therefore, many people argue that the money should be spent on improving existing public transportation. To conclude, according to the needs, different people have different preferences around the world. While some people think that the government should be more focused on fast-moving trains between the cities, many people argue that the budget should be used to improve the existing transportation system. Moreover, in my opinion, the national budget should be fairly distributed for both railways and other means of transportation for the overall improvement of a country’s transportation system.
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budgets
on building
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fast
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railway
infrastructures between
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cities
is necessary;
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people
believe that the
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budget
should
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existing
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. This essay will discuss both views and provide my opinion.

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countries,
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favour
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fast
and reliable
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railway
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transportation
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system
. The facts behind this
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favouritism
are that the
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trains
carry more passengers and
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goods
at the same time and
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reduce
traffic congestion.
Besides
,
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trains
are safer and faster
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can connect
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cities
to build a better communication
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.
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, Japan and China have
successfully
constructed
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tracks
around the country
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due
to which their
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transportation
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system
has become
extremely
strong and
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fast
.
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to the above-mentioned facts,
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believe that a large amount of
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should
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on a
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fast
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railway
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system
between cities.

However
,
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that
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money should
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existing
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.
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transport
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systems
play a crucial role in interconnecting the
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parts of the
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cities
.
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,
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tend to
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may
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these
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to commute
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within the city.
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cities
in the world, the underground
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has made the commuting within the city more reliable and quick.
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argue that the money should
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To conclude
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preferences around the world. While
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government
should be more focused on
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trains
between the
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,
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argue that the
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should be
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to
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the
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existing
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.
Moreover
, in my opinion, the national
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budget
should be
fairly
distributed for both
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railways
and other means of
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transportation
for the
overall
improvement of a country’s
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transportation
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.
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8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sum of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Other believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
355 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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