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in a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sum money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. other believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.1

in a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sum money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. other believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport v. 1
There is a various idea whether spend money on expanding lines of public transportation; besides, repairing and developing old transports. However, some people stick to the point that set up a new model of railways with high speed between cities. Although, I believe allocate money for improving and rebuild old public transportations is more useful. On the one hand, spending money on repairing and improving old transports is more necessary than establish fast trains. Firstly, by increasing a number of public transportations and expand lines of subways and busses contribute to reduction of use of private cars. Consequently, public transports help prevent environments from damaging by decreasing emit exhaust fumes such as carbon dioxide in the atmosphere that are resulting in increasing greenhouse gasses that lead to global warming. Additionally, spending money on repairing highways and railways that are regularly used by public transportation such as busses, cars, subways is essential because standard highways and railways that are equipped with enough facilities and rescue worker; as a result, they provide safety for citizens. On the other hand, although establishing fast public trains and new railways is so expensive, but it has some merits. Firstly, it can contribute to people save their time; in addition, providing for citizen safety that is a significant factor in people’s life. For instance, drivers when drive cars need to control speed, road and avoid themselves from accident; due to the fast trains people can commute safety without having the stress and arrive to their workplace as soon as possible In conclusion, public transport is an issue which affects all of us; government should spend money on type of public transport that is most beneficial for citizens although the speed of rails and new railway is necessary. However, I believe improving and repairing public transportations is more important for protecting the environment from damage.
There is a various
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idea
whether spend
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money
on expanding lines of
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public
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transportation
;
besides
,
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repairing
and developing
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old
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transports
.
However
,
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some
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people
stick to the point that set up a new model of
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railways
with high speed between cities. Although, I believe allocate
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money
for improving and rebuild
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old
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public
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transportations
is more useful.

On the one hand, spending
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money
on
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repairing
and improving
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old
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transports
is more necessary than establish
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fast
trains.
Firstly
, by increasing a number of
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public
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transportations
and expand lines of subways and busses contribute to reduction of
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use
of private cars.
Consequently
,
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public
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transports
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help
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prevent
environments from damaging by decreasing emit exhaust fumes such as carbon dioxide in the atmosphere that are resulting in increasing greenhouse gasses that lead to global warming.
Additionally
, spending
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money
on
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repairing
highways and
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railways
that are
regularly
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used
by
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public
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transportation
such as busses, cars, subways is essential
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because
standard highways and
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railways
that
are equipped
with
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enough
facilities and rescue worker;
as a result
, they provide safety for citizens.

On the other hand
, although establishing
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fast
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public
trains and new
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railways
is
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so
expensive,
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but
it has
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some
merits.
Firstly
, it can contribute to
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people
save their time;
in addition
, providing for citizen safety
that is
a significant factor in
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people’s
life.
For instance
, drivers when drive cars need to control speed, road and avoid themselves from accident; due to the
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fast
trains
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people
can commute safety without having the
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stress
and arrive to their workplace as
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soon
as
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possible


In conclusion
,
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public
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transport
is an issue which affects all of us;
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government
should spend
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money
on type of
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public
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transport
that is
most beneficial for citizens although the speed of rails and new
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railway
is necessary.
However
, I believe improving and
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repairing
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public
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transportations
is more
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important
for protecting the environment from damage.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
Language shapes the way we think, and determines what we can think about.
Benjamin Lee Whorf

IELTS essay in a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sum money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. other believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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