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In a global economy, many goods, including what we use on a daily basis, are transported from other countries in a long distance. To what extent do you think its benefits exceed its drawbacks? v.2

In a global economy, many goods, including what we use on a daily basis, are transported from other countries in a long distance. v. 2
Recent decades have witnessed an increase in imported goods, raising many questions of its substantial impacts on consumers’ living standards. Although the advantages could be pronounced, they are totally outweighed by the downsides. On the one hand, it should be acknowledged that there are many benefits when it comes to imported products. First, consumers could purchase many high-quality products from other countries, which are manufactured and scrutinized in compliance with strict regulations. For example, Vietnamese citizens could consume many fresh fruits and vegetables imported from European countries instead of local ones which are mainly contaminated with carcinogenic coloring and preservatives. Second, The rise in imported products, as well as trade deals and negotiations among many countries correlates with the increased national revenues of every nation, thereby fostering the prosperity of the national economy. On the other hand, imported goods could be fraught with numerous pitfalls. First, Imported products are invariably associated with the higher demand for vehicles such as airplanes and trucks for delivery. This would culminate in a higher concentration of carbon dioxide and methane in the atmosphere, worsening the overall air quality. In addition, Products from other nations are usually quite exorbitant stemming from high tariff and shipping costs. It is implied that these items would beyond the reach of individuals with limited incomes and exclusively within the affordability of the ones with strong purchasing power. In conclusion, imported goods bestow more disadvantages than benefits despite some economic potential. The official authorities should undertake some initiatives to incentivise the consumption of local items for the long-term sustainability of the national economy.
Recent decades have witnessed an increase in
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imported
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goods
, raising
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many
questions of its substantial impacts on consumers’ living standards. Although the advantages could
be pronounced
, they are
totally
outweighed by the downsides.

On the one hand, it should
be acknowledged
that there are
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many
benefits when it
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comes
to
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imported
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products
.
First
, consumers could
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purchase
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many
high-quality
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products
from other countries, which
are manufactured
and scrutinized in compliance with strict regulations.
For example
, Vietnamese citizens could consume
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many
fresh fruits and vegetables
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imported
from European countries
instead
of local
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ones
which are
mainly
contaminated with carcinogenic coloring and preservatives. Second, The rise in
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imported
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products
,
as well
as trade deals and negotiations among
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many
countries correlates with the increased national revenues of every nation, thereby fostering the prosperity of the national economy.

On the other hand
,
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imported
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goods
could be fraught with numerous pitfalls.
First
,
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Imported
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products
are
invariably
associated with the higher demand for vehicles such as airplanes and trucks for delivery. This would culminate in a higher concentration of carbon dioxide and methane in the atmosphere, worsening the
overall
air quality.
In addition
,
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Products
from other nations are
usually
quite exorbitant stemming from high tariff and shipping costs. It
is implied
that these items would beyond the reach of individuals with limited incomes and exclusively within the affordability of the
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ones
with strong purchasing power.

In conclusion
,
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imported
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goods
bestow more disadvantages than benefits despite
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some
economic potential. The official authorities should undertake
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some
initiatives to
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incentivise
the consumption of local items for the long-term sustainability of the national economy.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay In a global economy, many goods, including what we use on a daily basis, are transported from other countries in a long distance. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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