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Immigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons of immigration? To what consequences can it lead? Write at least 250 words. v.6

Immigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons of immigration? To what consequences can it lead? v. 6
In this contemporary era, migration to other countries has become a trend. People tend to shift abroad, to avail the better opportunities. Immigration can lead to failures of plans and it can create problems in the destination. Owing to modernization, many rush to upgrade their lifestyle on the urgent basis. Consequently, they choose those options which are beneficial for them and their family. As an illustration, my brother is planning to shift to Canada. Because Canada offers the high paying jobs and it is convenient to obtain Canadas nationality. My brother took this decision to secure a better future for him and his family. Therefore, the main cause for shifting is to obtain a settled life and better chances of growth. Although people migrate to other countries to upgrade their living, lack of adjustment in a new environment can happen. Many fail to adjust in a new environment because of the poor communication skills. As a result, they have to suffer from mental stress. Furthermore, it does not only possess a huge impact on an individual, but the economy of the country which receives immigrants also gets disturbed. It overburdens the economy because then the higher authorities have to provide the basic facilities to everyone. Hence, immigration not only fails the plan of a human being, but it also produces a negative impact on a country planned for immigration. To conclude, migrating to other countries is popular nowadays. The major reason for migration is to utilize the golden opportunities. This can lead to detrimental consequences such as lack of success in achieving the goals or creation of issues in the country planned to migrate.
In this contemporary era, migration to other
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countries
has become a trend.
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People
tend to shift abroad, to avail the better opportunities. Immigration can lead to failures of plans and it can create problems in the destination.

Owing to modernization,
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many rush
to upgrade their lifestyle on the urgent basis.
Consequently
, they choose those options which are beneficial for them and their family. As an illustration, my brother is planning to shift to Canada.
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Because
Canada offers the high paying jobs and it is convenient to obtain
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Canadas
nationality. My brother took this decision to secure a better future for him and his family.
Therefore
, the main cause for shifting is to obtain a settled life and better chances of growth.

Although
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people
migrate to other
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countries
to upgrade their living, lack of adjustment in a new environment can happen.
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Many fail
to adjust in a new environment
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because
of the poor communication
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skills
.
As a result
, they
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have to
suffer from mental
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stress
.
Furthermore
, it does not
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only
possess a huge impact on an individual,
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but
the economy of the
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country
which receives immigrants
also
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gets
disturbed. It overburdens the economy
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because
then the higher authorities
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have to
provide the basic facilities to everyone.
Hence
, immigration not
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only
fails the plan of a human being,
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but
it
also
produces a
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negative
impact on a
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country
planned for immigration.

To conclude
, migrating to other
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countries
is popular nowadays. The major reason for migration is to utilize the golden opportunities. This can lead to detrimental consequences such as lack of success in achieving the goals or creation of issues in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
planned to migrate.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Immigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons of immigration? To what consequences can it lead? v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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