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If you were asked to choose one movie that has influnced your thinkking, which one would you choose? why? What was especially impressive about the movie? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice. v.1

If you were asked to choose one movie that has influnced your thinkking, which one would you choose? why? What was especially impressive about the movie? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice. v. 1
It is considered by some that our generation has a possibility of watching movies on devices like iPod, laptops and so on, while there are others who argued that it is the necessity to watch a movie in a movie theatre to be completely relished. In my opinion, I believe that watching movies on devices or by visiting a cinema depends on the nature of a person. A commonly held belief that today people can watch movies without visiting cinemas. In other words, technology has developed since 1990th and gives a chance to watch films by downloading or online, there is no need to go to the cinema. Watching movies by not going to the cinemas is more easy and you do not waste your by queueing up. However, regarding to new movies or serials you need to wait for the premiere in TV or movie theatre. On the other hand, some people claim that you need to see films in the cinema to enjoy fully. For example, they think that it is really full of emotions to visit the cinema. In addition, the cinema has an own atmosphere which you can only feel by visiting. Finally, in my view, whether watching movies outside of visiting the cinema or on the phone or computer, depends on circumstances like type of the film, timing and so on. For example, if you want to watch films in your leisure, you can do it by watching online because the cinema has own schedule. In conclusion, watching films in the movie theatre it can not be compared with watching on the devices, however, using technology, which allows us to see variety types of films is more comfortable.
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is considered
by
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some
that our generation has a possibility of watching
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movies
on devices like iPod, laptops and
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so
on, while there are others who argued that it is the necessity to
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watch
a
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movie
in a
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movie
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theatre
to be completely relished. In my opinion, I believe that watching
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movies
on devices or by visiting a
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cinema
depends on the nature of a person.

A
commonly
held belief that
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today
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people
can
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watch
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movies
without visiting
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cinemas
.
In other words
, technology has developed since 1990th and gives a chance to
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watch
films by downloading or online, there is no need to go to the
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cinema
. Watching
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movies
by not going to the
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cinemas
is more easy and you do not waste your by
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queueing
up.
However
,
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regarding to
new
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movies
or serials you need to wait for the premiere in TV or
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movie
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theatre
.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
claim that you need to
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see
films in the
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cinema
to enjoy
fully
.
For example
, they
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think
that it is
really
full of emotions to visit the
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cinema
.
In addition
, the
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cinema
has an
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own
atmosphere which you can
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only
feel by visiting.

Finally
, in my view, whether watching
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movies
outside of visiting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cinema
or on the phone or computer, depends on circumstances like type of the film, timing and
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so
on.
For example
, if you want to
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watch
films in your leisure, you can do it by watching online
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because
the
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cinema
has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
schedule.

In conclusion
, watching films in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movie
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theatre
it can not
be compared
with watching on the devices,
however
, using technology, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allows
us to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
variety types of films is more comfortable.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay If you were asked to choose one movie that has influnced your thinkking, which one would you choose? why? What was especially impressive about the movie? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
283 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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