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If you were asked to choose one movie that has influenced your thinking, which one would you choose? Why? What was especially impressive about the movie? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice. v.1

If you were asked to choose one movie that has influenced your thinking, which one would you choose? Why? What was especially impressive about the movie? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice. v. 1
Education is of prime importance to the children. Whether or not a child should be Homeschooled is a very personal opinion and belief of the parents. Formal knowledge starts at the age of 3 right until lifetime. Everyone should have the right to be educated. This way of study such as happens in the form of a brick and mortar or the education can happen in the house. Moreover, the choice is left with the parents to decide which of the two to opt for. In this essay, we shall discuss the pros and cons of the statement. The advantage of home school would be parents have utmost control. Another would be instilling religion. This study at home concept is useful for kids who are handicapped in any form. The self confidence is upheld. In other words, the morale of the growing adult is always high. Few parents who wish for their kid to visit the museum more often and to do more outdoor course for learning in the house. Some more parents are dissatisfied with normal schooling due to lack of solid educational institutes. For example. Learning on your own in the United States constitutes the education of about 3. 4% of U. S. Students (approximately 2 million students). However, the biggest disadvantage would be the student having problems to socialize. The individual may even have problems to communicate. Furthermore, making friends would be a difficult task in hand. The kid would have never handled exams and homeworks. How to deal with pressure is something not taught at home. Not only is the person unprepared to face the world, but also are unaware of the unknown. To conclude, way of schooling is a choice left for the parents to decide for their kid. Home learning has its own pluses. Finally, in my opinion everyone should have the opportunity to be in a proper school as it makes him/her prepared for the future. 14 years of education in an institute is unmatched and unparalleled.
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Education
is of prime importance to the children.
Consider shortening this phrase to just "Whether". It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Whether or not
a child should
be Homeschooled
is a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
personal opinion and belief of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
. Formal knowledge
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
starts
at the age of 3 right until lifetime. Everyone should have the right to
be educated
. This way of study such as happens in the form of a brick and mortar or the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
can happen in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
.
Moreover
, the choice is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
to decide which of the two to opt for. In this essay, we shall discuss the pros and cons of the statement.

The advantage of home school would be
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
have utmost control. Another would be instilling religion. This study at home concept is useful for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
kids
who
are handicapped
in any form. The
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
self confidence
is upheld
.
In other words
, the morale of the growing adult is always high. Few
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
who wish for their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
kid
to visit the museum more
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
and to do more outdoor course for learning in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
are dissatisfied
with normal schooling due to lack of solid educational institutes.
For example
. Learning on your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
in the United States constitutes the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
of about 3. 4% of U. S. Students (approximately 2 million students).

However
, the biggest disadvantage would be the student having problems to socialize. The individual may even have problems to communicate.
Furthermore
, making friends would be a difficult task in hand. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
kid
would have never handled exams and
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homeworks
. How to deal with pressure is something not taught at home. Not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
is the person unprepared to face the world,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
are unaware of the unknown.

To conclude
, way of schooling is a choice
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
to decide for their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
kid
. Home learning has its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
pluses.
Finally
, in my opinion everyone should have the opportunity to be in a proper school as it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
him/her prepared for the future. 14 years of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
in an institute
is unmatched
and unparalleled.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
As a hawk flieth not high with one wing, even so a man reacheth not to excellence with one tongue.
Roger Ascham

IELTS essay If you were asked to choose one movie that has influenced your thinking, which one would you choose? Why? What was especially impressive about the movie? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
334 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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