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If children behave badly should their parents take responsibility and also be punished State your answer and give your reasons v.2

If children behave badly should their parents take responsibility and also be punished State your answer and give your reasons v. 2
Sabikunnahar Rony Sun, Apr 5, 10: 16 PM (9 hours ago) to me Children acquire their basic and primary knowledge from their parents who provide initial elements of getting such knowledge. These days, there is a debate that whether parents are responsible for their misdeeds and should they be punished because of their wrong doings. I strongly believe that, if juveniles do any misdoings their parents should take the responsibility as they bring their children in this world. There are ample reasons that sorrounded my opinion. Firstly, according to me, parents should take proper care to their child' s grow up as they bring them on the earth so it is their own responsibility to brought them up properly. As they are child they have no knowledge about any bad activities and also they are unaware about anything that is against morality. They are parents who should teach their pagony and spend with them a quantity of time. In this present days, Father along with their mother work in outside so that they are not able to allocate their time properly with their children. However, their children did not get proper guidance from them and they try to spend most of their times by watching TV, chatting with friends sometimes their parents keep them under maid guidance. For this reason sometimes juvelines accept misdeeds as morals, for which some how their parents are responsible. Secondly, if parents did not show any attention towards their children, they will do this wrong with their teachers and elders. When child do any mistake parents should make them aware about their such mistakes. On the other hand, they should take under punishment which must be little like: forbidden to play games with best friend or not to give their favourite dish to eat and so on. For instance, one of my neighbours went out for job keeping their ten years daughter under the care of house maid. As a result this girl uesd to do misbehave with her parents under wrong companies and as a penulty her parents locked her in a dark room. One day later the parents find their daughter dead. So, parents should assure their proper guidance towards their pagony otherwise it will be harder for them to control them if they grown up with such unethical actions. To sum up, I want to conclude my opinion with the saying that, home is the first institution for learning where parents are the best mentors. Take care of children and give them right ethics is the first and foremost duty of every parents. If children did any misdeeds parents should accept their responsibility and correct them with small penulty not hard punishment.
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Sun, Apr 5, 10: 16 PM (9 hours ago)

to me

Children acquire their basic and primary knowledge from their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
who provide initial elements of getting such knowledge. These days, there is a debate that whether
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
are responsible for their misdeeds and should they
be punished
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because
of their
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
wrong
doings. I
strongly
believe that, if juveniles do any misdoings their
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parents
should take the responsibility as they bring their
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children
in this world. There are ample reasons that
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sorrounded
my opinion.

Firstly
, according to me,
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parents
should take proper care to their
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child&
#039; s grow up as they bring them on the earth
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so
it is their
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own
responsibility to brought them up
properly
. As they are child they have no knowledge about any
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
activities and
also
they are unaware about anything
that is
against morality. They are
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parents
who should teach their
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pagony
and spend with them a quantity of time. In this present days, Father along with their mother work in outside
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that they are not able to allocate their time
properly
with their
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children
.
However
, their
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children
did not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
proper guidance from
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
them and
they try to spend most of their times by watching TV, chatting with friends
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
their
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parents
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
them under maid guidance.
For this reason
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sometimes
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juvelines
accept misdeeds as morals, for which
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some how
their
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parents
are responsible.

Secondly
, if
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parents
did not
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show
any attention towards their
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children
, they will do this
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wrong
with their teachers and elders.
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When
child do any mistake
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parents
should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them aware about their such mistakes.
On the other hand
, they should take under punishment which
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must
be
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little
like: forbidden to play games with best friend or not to give their
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favourite
dish to eat and
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so
on.
For instance
, one of my
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neighbours
went out for job keeping their ten years daughter under the care of
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house
maid.
As a result
this girl
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uesd
to do misbehave with her
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parents
under
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wrong
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companies
and as a
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penulty
her
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parents
locked her in a dark room. One day later the
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parents
find their daughter dead.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
,
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parents
should assure their proper guidance towards their
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pagony
otherwise
it will be harder for them to control them if they grown up with such unethical actions.

To sum up, I want
to conclude
my opinion with the saying that, home is the
first
institution for learning where
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
are the best mentors. Take care of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
and give them right ethics is the
first
and foremost duty of every
The noun should be probably in the singular form: "parent"?
parents
. If
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children
did any misdeeds
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parents
should accept their responsibility and correct them with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
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penulty
not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
punishment.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Mistakes

IELTS essay If children behave badly should their parents take responsibility and also be punished State your answer and give your reasons v. 2

Essay
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7 paragraphs
450 words
5.5
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