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Agree or disagree In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer v.2

Agree or disagree In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer v. 2
Cars are one of the most brilliant innovations of the twentieth century. It is thought by some people that cars would increase in upcoming years as a result of the population’s increase. However, I firmly believe that in the near future we will have only fewer cars in use. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs. First of all, the number of cars will reduce in two decades because energy consumption is becoming a real problem. Many experts argue that we no longer would have enough fossil fuel available in the future. On top of that people tend to use more convenient forms of transportation such as uber and lyft, so that they do not want to worry about car problems that they might face while driving. Furthermore, since the price of fossil fuel will increase because of its scarcity, people would prefer not to spend money, so that they would rather take uber than drive their own cars. Overall, people would not use their cars anymore, but use other forms of transportation, which would help them to save money and approach toward their convenience. Secondly, nowadays, people all over the world are aware of environmental issues that really have a huge impact on their well-being and health. Many people have started to take action to curtail the damages that have been done in recent decades. For example, the level of air pollution has drastically increased in the past few years, so citizens of different countries have found different ways to reduce the release of carbon dioxide in the air. Therefore, some people are already using only public transportation. Others are using carpooling or riding a bike instead of driving. Accordingly, the environmental problems, which are expanding on a global scale, have raised awareness everywhere. Thus, people are doing their best to not use cars which appears to be the major factor of polluting our environment. In conclusion, I strongly believe that cars would be reduced in number in twenty years from now. This is because people do not want to waste their money on high prices of gasoline and because they want to protect their environment, so that they could be able to live a healthy life.
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some
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people
that
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cars
would increase in upcoming years
as a result
of the population’s increase.
However
, I
firmly
believe that in the near future we will have
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only
fewer
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cars
in
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use
. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.

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First of all
, the number of
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cars
will
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reduce
in two decades
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because
energy consumption is becoming a real problem.
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Many
experts argue that we no longer would have
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enough
fossil fuel available in the future.
On top of that
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people
tend to
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use
more convenient forms of transportation such as
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uber
and
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lyft
,
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so
that they do not want to worry about
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car
problems that they might face while driving.
Furthermore
, since the price of fossil fuel will increase
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because
of its scarcity,
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people
would prefer not to spend money,
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so
that they would
rather
take
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uber
than drive their
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own
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cars
.
Overall
,
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people
would not
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use
their
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cars
anymore,
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but
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use
other forms of transportation, which would
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help
them to save money and approach toward their convenience.

Secondly
, nowadays,
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people
all over the world are aware of environmental issues that
really
have a huge impact on their well-being and health.
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Many
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people
have
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started
to take action to curtail the damages that have
been done
in recent decades.
For example
, the level of air pollution has
drastically
increased in the past few years,
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so
citizens of
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different
countries have found
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different
ways to
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reduce
the release of carbon dioxide in the air.
Therefore
,
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some
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people
are already using
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only
public transportation. Others are using carpooling or riding a bike
instead
of driving.
Accordingly
, the environmental problems, which are expanding on a global scale, have raised awareness everywhere.
Thus
,
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people
are doing their best to not
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use
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cars
which appears to be the major factor of polluting our environment.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
believe that
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cars
would be
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reduced
in number in twenty years from
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now
. This is
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because
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people
do not want to waste their money on high prices of gasoline and
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because
they want to protect their environment,
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so
that they could be able to
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live
a healthy life.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Agree or disagree In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
376 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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