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The table below gives information about the employment rates and the average annual salaries of new graduates in an Australian University in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The table below gives information about the employment rates and the average annual salaries of new graduates in an Australian University in 2009.
The given table elucidates the employment rates and the average yearly salaries of fresh degree holders of an Australian University in 2009. 93% of the health graduates were employed and received and average annual salary of $42, 000. Law and Engineering and IT graduates received the highest salaries of $59, 000 dollars each. It is interesting to note that their employment rate was lesser than that of Health graduates but their average salaries were higher. 78% of those graduating from the business field got employment and their average salaries per year were $ 52, 000. 72% of those holding a bachelors degree in Arts and Social Science were employed and their average annual salaries were $ 50, 000. Overall, the least paid jobs were in Health and Science, whereas Law and IT and Engineering gaduates were the best paid
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of fresh degree holders of an Australian University in 2009.

93% of the health graduates
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and received and
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$42, 000. Law and Engineering and IT graduates received the highest
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of $59, 000 dollars each. It is interesting to note that their employment rate was lesser than that of Health graduates
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were higher. 78% of those graduating from the business field
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employment and their
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$ 52
, 000. 72% of those holding a bachelors degree in Arts and Social Science
were employed
and their
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average
annual
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were
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$ 50
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Overall
, the least paid jobs were in Health and Science, whereas Law and IT and Engineering
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IELTS essay The table below gives information about the employment rates and the average annual salaries of new graduates in an Australian University in 2009.

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138 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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