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if a product is sold and people buy it, then advertising is not necessary and can be considered a kind of entertainment. do you agree or disagree? v.8

if a product is sold and people buy it, then advertising is not necessary and can be considered a kind of entertainment. v. 8
Advertisement is the art through which producers bring their products and consumers. It is also said that it acts as a bridge that closes the gap between the sellers and the buyers. Since we buy our products of interest with or without advertising, is it really necessary? This essay will argue that advertising is essential and not a form of amusement. I understand that there are some advert placements that could be amusing to the viewers. For instance, advertising goods targeted at kids. These include drinks and snacks solely meant for children. In order to attract the attention of the targeted population, the advert has to speak the language these viewers understand, which is cartoon-like and some form of entertainment. If this is not done, the children may lose interest and the message will be lost. Thus, in this case, a commercial might have to be amusing to catch the interest of the kids. However, in most cases, commercials are not done to amuse the public, instead it is a significant business strategy. Producers promote or make their goods known to the public for different reasons. These ranges from eliminating a competitor to simply making the public aware. Recent researches have shown that there is usually a significant increase in sales of goods following advert placements made provided that the commercials were consistent. In conclusion, I absolutely disagree that commercials are for amusements. Instead, I think the advertisement is one essential method of increasing sales because it makes the public aware of what you are offering them.
Advertisement is the art through which producers bring their products and consumers. It is
also
said that it acts as a bridge that closes the gap between the sellers and the buyers. Since we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
our products of interest with or without advertising, is it
really
necessary? This essay will argue that advertising is essential and not a form of amusement.

I understand that there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
advert placements that could be amusing to the viewers.
For instance
, advertising
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
targeted at kids. These include drinks and snacks
solely
meant for children. In order to attract the attention of the targeted population, the advert
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
has to
speak the language these viewers understand, which is cartoon-like and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
form of entertainment. If this is not done, the children may lose interest and the message will
be lost
.
Thus
,
in this case
, a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
commercial
might
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
be amusing to catch the interest of the kids.

However
,
in most cases
, commercials are not done to amuse the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
,
instead
it is a significant business strategy. Producers promote or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
known to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
reasons. These ranges from eliminating a competitor to
simply
making the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
aware. Recent researches have shown that there is
usually
a significant increase in sales of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
following advert placements made provided that the commercials were consistent.

In conclusion
, I
absolutely
disagree that commercials are for amusements.
Instead
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
the advertisement is one essential method of increasing sales
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
aware of what you are offering them.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay if a product is sold and people buy it, then advertising is not necessary and can be considered a kind of entertainment. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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