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If a product is sold and people buy it, then advertising is not necessary and can be considered a kind of entertainment. Do you agree or disagree with this? v.5

If a product is sold and people buy it, then advertising is not necessary and can be considered a kind of entertainment. with this? v. 5
Advertisement industries have been growing rapidly lately, especially since we have entered the social media era. So many entrepreneurs introduce their products and innovations by advertising through social media. However, some people believe that advertising is not useful if a product can be sold easily. There is also a notion that if this case happened, advertising will be lost its main function and can only be seen as an entertaining source. In this essay, I shall explain some functions of advertising itself and provide some arguments about why I disagree with the statement above. To begin with, advertising has several functions, for instance introducing products to the market, creating a brand image, and increasing sales. There are several products that are not necessary to be advertised because they only reach a niche market, namely Rolex, a brand of a luxury watch. However, in general, advertising a product can give some beneficial impacts as mentioned before. Furthermore, we have to be clear the market segment and the market size that we want to reach for a product. If we only think about short-term sales and profit, then advertising is clearly unnecessary. For example, selling a homemade cake to our classmates. It can be easily sold, but it is not scalable and sustainable. However, if we want to sell skin care products, we have to gain customers’ trust even just to try the product samples. We have to build the brand image that the skin care products that we sell are safe. Once we have gained customers trust and successfully built the desired brand image, the product selling will be increasing year by year, and this process can be enhanced by endorsing some famous actress to use the skin care products. To conclude, I personally disagree with the opinion that advertising is unnecessary and only a kind of entertainment. I believe there are some benefits of advertising a product if we set a long-term and sustainable goal, not only simply sell the product, but also build a brand image.
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rapidly
lately,
especially
since we have entered the social media era.
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So
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many
entrepreneurs introduce their
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products
and innovations by advertising through social media.
However
,
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some
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people
believe that advertising is not useful if a
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product
can
be sold
easily
. There is
also
a notion that if this case happened, advertising will
be lost
its main function and can
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only
be
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seen
as an entertaining source. In this essay, I shall
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explain
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some
functions of advertising itself and provide
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some
arguments about why I disagree with the statement above.

To
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begin
with, advertising has several functions,
for instance
introducing
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products
to the
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market
, creating a
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brand
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image
, and increasing sales. There are several
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products
that are not necessary to
be advertised
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because
they
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only
reach a niche
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market
,
namely
Rolex, a
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brand
of a luxury
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watch
.
However
,
in general
, advertising a
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product
can give
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some
beneficial impacts as mentioned
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before
.

Furthermore
, we
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have to
be
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clear
the
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market
segment and the
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market
size that we want to reach for a
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product
. If we
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only
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think
about short-term sales and profit, then advertising is
clearly
unnecessary.
For example
, selling a homemade cake to our classmates. It can be
easily
sold,
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but
it is not scalable and sustainable.
However
, if we want to sell skin care
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products
, we
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have to
gain customers’ trust even
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just
to try the
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product
samples. We
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have to
build the
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brand
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image
that the skin care
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products
that we sell are safe. Once we have gained customers trust and
successfully
built the desired
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brand
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image
, the
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product
selling will be increasing year by year, and this process can
be enhanced
by endorsing
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some
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famous
actress to
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use
the skin care products.

To conclude
, I
personally
disagree with the opinion that advertising is unnecessary and
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only
a kind of entertainment. I believe there are
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some
benefits of advertising a
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product
if we set a long-term and sustainable goal, not
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only
simply
sell the
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product
,
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but
also
build a
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brand
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image
.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay If a product is sold and people buy it, then advertising is not necessary and can be considered a kind of entertainment. with this? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
337 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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