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IELTS Academic Writing TaskWRITING TASK 2You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advan v.1

IELTS Academic Writing TaskWRITING TASK 2 In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advan v. 1
Hiring managers all over the world have a number of factors to consider while recruiting prospective workers. One of the these decisive factors is age, and it has been outlawed in some countries to refuse an applicant just on grounds of age. This essay will discuss the main benefit and drawback of this recent approach. The main advantage of this law is that, it will result in different job sectors having experienced professionals still in active service to bring up newer staffs. In other words, professionals, who have gained experience over the years, can still work efficiently and at the same time coach the young staffs. For instance, the aviation industry employs older pilots, and they serve as the main pilots on planes, coaching the co-pilots at the same time. Consequently, this helps nurture the younger pilots into experience faster. Despite this benefit, a particular worrisome drawback is the problem jobs that are age specific. In essence, some jobs are tailored for a particular age demographic, and in places where this law is in place, in some cases, can lead to catastrophic results. An example of this is in Malta, where there are no age restrictions for unskilled labour, it was discovered that most hotels and restaurants employed under-aged girls as bartenders. This lead to a series of sexual assault and molestation of these young workers as they were not old enough to work in such environment. In conclusion, the main merit of passing a law that allows applicants of all ages is that, it allows for a more experienced training of younger staffs and a major demerit of this, is the unfortunate events that it brings when jobs with age specificity are not monitored. It is my hope, that governments around the world would look critically into these scenarios before passing a law.
Hiring managers all over the world have a number of factors to consider while recruiting prospective workers. One of the these decisive factors is
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age
, and it has
been outlawed
in
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some
countries to refuse an applicant
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just
on grounds of
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age
. This essay will discuss the
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main
benefit and drawback of this recent approach.

The
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main
advantage of this
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law
is that, it will result in
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different
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job
sectors having experienced professionals
still
in active service to bring up newer staffs.
In other words
, professionals, who have gained experience over the years, can
still
work
efficiently
and at the same time coach the young staffs.
For instance
, the aviation industry employs older pilots, and they serve as the
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main
pilots on
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planes
, coaching the co-pilots at the same time.
Consequently
, this
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helps
nurture the younger pilots into experience faster.

Despite this benefit, a particular worrisome drawback is the problem
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jobs
that are
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age
specific. In essence,
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some
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jobs
are tailored
for a particular
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age
demographic, and in places where this
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law
is in place, in
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some
cases, can lead to catastrophic results. An example of this is in Malta, where there are no
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age
restrictions for unskilled
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labour
, it
was discovered
that most hotels and restaurants employed under-aged girls as bartenders. This lead to a series of sexual assault and molestation of these young workers as they were not
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old
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enough
to work in such environment.

In conclusion
, the
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main
merit of passing a
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law
that
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allows
applicants of all
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ages
is that, it
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allows
for a more experienced training of younger staffs and a major demerit of this, is the unfortunate
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events
that it brings when
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jobs
with
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age
specificity are not monitored. It is my hope, that
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governments
around the world would look
critically
into these scenarios
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before
passing a
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law
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay IELTS Academic Writing TaskWRITING TASK 2 In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advan v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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