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Human activity has had negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change. Discuss both view and give your opinion. v.1

Human activity has had negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change. v. 1
It is irrefutable that the activities of human beings have adverse effects on the flora and fauna across the globe. While some people believe that nothing can be done to ameliorate the situation, I would argue that situation can be improved if proper actions are taken. On the one side, people believe that humans are the most dominant species on this planet and their development is indispensable. Consequently, if other species are suffering, this situation is inevitable and no actions could be taken to make conditions better. For instance, to accommodate rapidly increasing population, large forests have been cut down and various animals' natural habitats are being destroyed. But these actions are necessary for fast progression for the humans. If we ignore the human requirements and give more emphasis to other species, it would detrimentally affect our development pace. On the other hand, I opine that each living organism is essential for smooth working of the environment, hence, human developments and plants and animals' conservation procedures should go hand in hand. To illustrate this we can take an example of construction of New Delhi metro project. Although it was a quite ambitious project that could have harmed the environment deeply, the firm made sure that they plant ten trees in replacement of each tree they cut to build the metro line. We should remember that we need these plants and animals for our survival; therefore, we should put efforts to conserve them. In conclusion, though some people opine that perilous effects of human activities on plants and animals cannot be stopped because our development is dependent on it, I firmly believe that the presence of all living organisms is crucial, and they should be protected against any damage.
It is irrefutable that the activities of
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human
beings have adverse effects on the flora and fauna across the globe. While
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some
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people
believe that nothing can
be done
to ameliorate the situation, I would argue that situation can be
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improved
if proper actions
are taken
.

On the one side,
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people
believe that
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humans
are the most dominant species on this planet and their
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development
is indispensable.
Consequently
, if other species are suffering, this situation is inevitable and no actions could
be taken
to
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make
conditions better.
For instance
, to accommodate
rapidly
increasing population, large forests have been
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cut
down and various animals' natural habitats are being
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destroyed
.
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But
these actions are necessary for
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fast
progression for the
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humans
. If we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignore
the
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human
requirements and give more emphasis to other species, it would
detrimentally
affect our
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development
pace.

On the other hand
, I opine that each living organism is essential for smooth working of the environment,
hence
,
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human
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developments
and
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plants
and animals' conservation procedures should go hand in hand. To illustrate this we can take an example of construction of New Delhi metro project. Although it was a quite ambitious project that could have harmed the environment
deeply
, the firm made sure that they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plant
ten trees in replacement of each tree they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
to build the metro line. We should remember that we need these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plants
and animals for our survival;
therefore
, we should put efforts to conserve them.

In conclusion
, though
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some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
opine that perilous effects of
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human
activities on
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plants
and animals cannot be
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stopped
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because
our
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development
is dependent on it, I
firmly
believe that the presence of all living organisms is crucial, and they should
be protected
against any damage.
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IELTS essay Human activity has had negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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