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Human activity has had a negative effect on plants and animal all over the world. Some people think that it is too late to do something about it. Others think that there is still time to take effective action. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.2

Human activity has had a negative effect on plants and animal all over the world. Some people think that it is too late to do something about it. Others think that there is still time to take effective action. v. 2
Some people think that Its's too late to overcome the side effects, due the certain actions by human's involvement on the plants and wildlife animals. While, others think that they still do have enough time to avoid those negative side effects. However, this essay will discuss both views along with the my opinion. On the one hand, because of the deforestation already reached on maximum level, there was no option for people to grow up plenty of trees. In other words, due to various reasons people habituated to cut down the trees irrespective of environment concerns which lead to lack of rains. For instance, recent data shows up, over 70 percentage of forests has been turned into non-fertilized lands for the human needs. Moreover, due to lack of enough space to stay for wildlife animals in forests, the ratio of indigenous animals deteriorated within short time. In my view, though we depend on trees, there should be a minimum range of plants should present. On the other hand, by increasing plantation percentage all over the world, over a period of time, we can avoid the deforestation problem. Also, by implementing various harvest methods across the globe, which mean that bringing awareness in public about the process of plantation. In addition to that, by taking certain preliminary actions by the state and central government authorities for the safety of the ecosystem and by taking individual responsibility of every citizen, we can minimize the negative side effects. To conclude, In my view, even though we had a negative on the environment for the wildlife habitats and tress, there is still some hope that we can avoid by following certain precautionary measurements with the help of individual and government sectors
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people
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s too late to overcome the side effects, due the certain actions by human's involvement on the plants and wildlife animals.
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, others
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think
that they
still
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enough
time to avoid those
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negative
side effects.
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, this essay will discuss both views along with
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.

On the one hand,
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because
of the deforestation already reached on maximum level, there was no option for
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people
to grow up
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plenty
of trees.
In other words
, due to various reasons
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
habituated to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
down the trees irrespective of environment concerns which lead to lack of rains.
For instance
, recent data
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
up, over 70 percentage of forests has
been turned
into non-fertilized lands for the human needs.
Moreover
, due to lack of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
space to stay for wildlife animals in forests, the ratio of indigenous animals deteriorated within short time. In my view, though we depend on trees, there should be a minimum range of plants should present.

On the other hand
, by increasing plantation percentage all over the world, over a period of time, we can avoid the deforestation problem.
Also
, by implementing various harvest methods across the globe, which mean that bringing awareness in public about the process of plantation.
In addition
to that, by taking certain preliminary actions by the state and central
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
authorities for the safety of the ecosystem and by taking individual responsibility of every citizen, we can minimize the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
side effects.

To conclude
, In my view,
even though
we had a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
on the environment for the wildlife habitats and tress, there is
still
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
hope that we can avoid by following certain precautionary measurements with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of individual and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
sectors
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Human activity has had a negative effect on plants and animal all over the world. Some people think that it is too late to do something about it. Others think that there is still time to take effective action. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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