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However, there is no denial that socialization is not appreciated by company, but such abilities are highly subjective and it also depends on person to person. v.2

However, there is no denial that socialization is not appreciated by company, but such abilities are highly subjective and it also depends on person to person. v. 2
It is believed by many people that interpersonal skills are more crucial than educational qualification for a job. I am completely in disagreement with the statement that amiable nature of a candidate is required over field study. In this essay, I shall discuss the two primary reasons in detail; firstly, numerous jobs need specialized degree and secondly, after qualification; experience matter. To begin with, there are several jobs in the market where employer purely need specialization into related field. This is because such jobs are totally dependent on employee’s prerequisite and advance study. For example, profession like doctor, lawyer, pilot and engineer do not need social talent to complete their task. In fact, even a small job like sales executive need rudimentary education rather than social competence. Therefore, it is essential for worker to have qualification first. On the other hand, if something consider by an employer over qualification that is usually experience and achievements in particular profession. The reason because if a person is content with information, he/she will bring incredible successful outcomes. For instance, a recent research project done by Harvard University on employment found that almost every big firm select candidate who has adequate number of experience. Hence, it is clear that experience comes with education and they go hand in hand. However, there is no denial that socialization is not appreciated by company, but such abilities are highly subjective in nature and it also depends on person to person and employer’s requirement. In conclusion, as aforementioned, I strongly concur with the notion that qualification is essential for any job more than social skills. Moreover, it is significantly evident that even interpersonal skills developed with degree and experience.
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is believed
by
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many
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people
that interpersonal
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skills
are more crucial than educational
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qualification
for a
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job
. I am completely in disagreement with the statement that amiable nature of a candidate
is required
over field study. In this essay, I shall discuss the two primary reasons in detail;
firstly
, numerous
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jobs
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need
specialized degree and
secondly
, after
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qualification
;
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experience
matter.

To
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begin
with, there are several
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jobs
in the market where employer
purely
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need
specialization into related field. This is
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because
such
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jobs
are
totally
dependent on employee’s prerequisite and advance study.
For example
, profession like doctor, lawyer, pilot and engineer do not
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need
social talent to complete their task. In fact, even a
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small
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job
like sales executive
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need
rudimentary education
rather
than social competence.
Therefore
, it is essential for worker to have
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qualification
first
.

On the other hand
, if something consider by an employer over
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qualification
that is
usually
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experience
and achievements
in particular
profession. The reason
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because
if a person is content with information, he/she will bring incredible successful outcomes.
For instance
, a recent research project done by Harvard University on employment found that almost every
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big
firm select candidate who has adequate number of
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experience
.
Hence
, it is
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clear
that
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experience
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comes
with
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
education and
they go hand in hand.

However
, there is no denial that socialization is not appreciated by
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company
,
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but
such abilities are
highly
subjective in nature and it
also
depends on person to person and employer’s requirement.

In conclusion
, as aforementioned, I
strongly
concur with the notion that
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qualification
is essential for any
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job
more than social
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skills
.
Moreover
, it is
significantly
evident that even interpersonal
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skills
developed with degree and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experience
.
19Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay However, there is no denial that socialization is not appreciated by company, but such abilities are highly subjective and it also depends on person to person. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
281 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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