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With the development of online there is no future for the radio To what extent do you agree v.2

With the development of online there is no future for the radio 2
There is an issue regarding the prospect of radio. Some singers claim that radio will vanish lately due to the popularity of the web. This essay disagrees with their viewpoint. Let us start with reasons why a few singers state radio will disappear in the future due to the cyber. The first reason is that people can read the news and enjoy songs on the global network. Citizens can find either any news or piece of melody on the web, so it is unnecessary for them to turn on CD players and to wait for news time between music breaks. Another reason is that radio stations also broadcast their programs digitally online. People do not have to abandon their favorite transmission channels, because they can listen to them online. Furthermore, radio pulses are unavailable in remote areas. Radio signals weaken passing through hills as well as mountains, but with the help of the satellite connection, song goers are always connected to the web. However, some media managers believe that radio will remain for a long time. They justify their opinion with the following arguments. Firstly, radio is both free and widespread. In contrast to the web, radio lovers do not have to pay for the Internet to listen to the radio, because their wave receivers, which are present in nearly every modern device, can accept pervasive radio waves. Secondly, radio programs generally come live. Most humans usually consider radio more interesting to listen to, thanks to its coverage of events as well as different entertaining programs in real time. Moreover, radio is relevant to a particular region. Radio streams can supply news seekers with the info about their region, owing to their focus on events in their hometown. In conclusion, although several celebrities argue that the cyberspace can cause the death of radio, I think that radio will stay unaffected by the net, as long as it is unpaid and amusing.
There is an issue regarding the prospect of
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radio
.
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Some
singers claim that
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radio
will vanish lately due to the popularity of the web. This essay disagrees with their viewpoint.

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Let
us
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start
with reasons why a few singers state
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radio
will disappear in the future due to the cyber. The
first
reason is that
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people
can read the
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news
and enjoy songs on the global network. Citizens can find either any
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news
or piece of melody on the web,
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so
it is unnecessary for them to turn on CD players and to wait for
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news
time between music breaks. Another reason is that
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radio
stations
also
broadcast their programs
digitally
online.
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People
do not
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have to
abandon their favorite transmission channels,
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because
they can listen to them online.
Furthermore
,
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radio
pulses are unavailable in remote areas.
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Radio
signals weaken passing through hills
as well
as mountains,
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but
with the
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help
of the satellite connection, song goers are always connected to the web.

However
,
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some
media managers believe that
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radio
will remain for a long time. They justify their opinion with the following arguments.
Firstly
,
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radio
is both free and widespread.
In contrast
to the web,
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radio
lovers do not
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have to
pay for the Internet to listen to the
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radio
,
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because
their wave receivers, which are present in
nearly
every modern device, can accept pervasive
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radio
waves.
Secondly
,
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radio
programs
generally
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come
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live
. Most humans
usually
consider
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radio
more interesting to listen to, thanks to its coverage of
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events
as well
as
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different
entertaining programs in real time.
Moreover
,
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radio
is relevant to a particular region.
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Radio
streams can supply
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news
seekers with the info about their region, owing to their focus on
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
in their hometown.

In conclusion
, although several celebrities argue that the cyberspace can cause the death of
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radio
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that
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radio
will stay unaffected by the net, as long as it is unpaid and amusing.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay With the development of online there is no future for the radio 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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