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In some countries, the number of shootings increases because many people have guns at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

In some countries, the number of shootings increases because many people have guns at home. v. 1
The topic of “throwaway society” has been discussed in recent years. In this society, people tend to throw away their old items regardless of whether or not they still work and purchase the latest version of things. This essay will look at some primary reasons for this phenomenon and the adverse impacts that it could have on individuals and the environment. There are several causes of the throwaway society and I think advertising could be the first culprit. Advertisements encourage people to purchase goods and services that they do not really need by delivering a message that possessing the latest version of an item could improve a person’s self-image, confidence and even social status. For example, many of today’s teenagers spend nearly $1, 500 buying iPhone X to show that they are wealthy and fashionable even though their old phones are still in good condition and perfectly functional. Another cause is mass production of non-durable goods which are often used once and thrown away. These products are much cheaper and more convenient than durable ones, hence, attract a large number of customers. Individuals living in the throwaway society could suffer a great deal. They could easily get into serious debt if they get into the habit of buying the latest, novelty items. Many teens are being burdened with thousands of dollars in credit card debt for their unnecessary purchases, which could lead to depression and anxiety. Environmental degradation is another problem facing the throwaway society. Due to excessive production of disposable goods, huge amounts of hazardous waste are being discharged into the environment, which directly contaminates soil and water. In conclusion, there are various factors leading to the advent of our throwaway society and increasing consumer debt and environmental damage are the two major problems which result from this society.
The topic of
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“throwaway
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society”
has
been discussed
in recent years. In this
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society
,
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people
tend to throw away their
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old
items regardless of
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whether or not
they
still
work and
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purchase
the latest version of things. This essay will look at
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some
primary reasons for this phenomenon and the adverse impacts that it could have on individuals and the environment.

There are several causes of the
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throwaway
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society
and I
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think
advertising could be the
first
culprit. Advertisements encourage
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people
to
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purchase
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goods
and services that they do not
really
need by delivering a message that possessing the latest version of an item could
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improve
a person’s self-image, confidence and even social status.
For example
,
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many
of
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today
’s
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teenagers
spend
nearly
$1, 500 buying iPhone X to
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show
that they are wealthy and fashionable
even though
their
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old
phones are
still
in
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good
condition and
perfectly
functional. Another cause is mass production of non-durable
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goods
which are
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often
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used
once and thrown away. These products are much cheaper and more convenient than durable ones,
hence
, attract
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a large number of
customers.

Individuals living in the
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throwaway
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society
could suffer a great deal. They could
easily
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get
into serious debt if they
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get
into the habit of buying the latest, novelty items.
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Many
teens are
being burdened
with thousands of dollars in credit card debt for their unnecessary
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purchases
, which could lead to depression and anxiety. Environmental degradation is another problem facing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
throwaway
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
society
. Due to excessive production of disposable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
goods
, huge amounts of hazardous waste are
being discharged
into the environment, which
directly
contaminates soil and water.

In conclusion
, there are various factors leading to the advent of our
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throwaway
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society
and increasing consumer debt and environmental damage are the two major problems which result from this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
society
.
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IELTS essay In some countries, the number of shootings increases because many people have guns at home. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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