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Some people claim that there are more disadvantage of the car than its advantage. Do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people claim that there are more disadvantage of the car than its advantage. v. 2
There are many aspects of the car such as positive aspect and negative aspect. Some people have argument that more negative aspect of the car than positive aspect. I disagree, because positive and negative aspect of the car is equal. Almost people in the world has a car moreover now most leasing finance is cheap if people want to buy car. The car is luxury goods and the price is very expensive. Several countries have competition to production of car and give cheap interest if some people use lease finance. The car is not obligatory need to daily activity but to emergency situation the car is very important. However, who buys the car have to prepare a lot of money. Now days, financial leasing establish one way to has a car, pay down payment and remain can pay by installment. Commonly, positive aspect for the car cost of tax every year, need a lot of money to prepare maintenance every month, cost of assurance to car very expensive and price of the car has depreciation, there is inter fence because of car. There are, also positive aspect for a car, comfortable feel go to everywhere by car, can bring everything suited capacity of car, look for earn money to available rent car. So, there are many advantages and disadvantages of car depend on the needed. The car is luxuries goods to middle society but to businessman and businesswoman car become obligatory need. Especially to big family very important to belong car and car has many benefits to support their activity.
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positive
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negative
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.
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people
have argument that more
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negative
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aspect
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than
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positive
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aspect
. I disagree,
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because
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positive
and
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negative
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aspect
of the
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car
is equal. Almost
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people
in the world has a
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car
moreover
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now
most leasing finance is
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cheap
if
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people
want to
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buy
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car
. The
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car
is luxury
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goods
and the price is
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very
expensive. Several countries have competition to production of
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car
and give
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cheap
interest if
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some
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people
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use
lease finance.

The
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is not obligatory need to daily activity
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to emergency situation the
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car
is
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very
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important
.
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buys
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car
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have to
prepare
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days, financial leasing establish one way to has a
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car
, pay down payment and remain can pay by installment.
Commonly
,
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positive
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aspect
for the
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car
cost of tax every year, need
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a lot of
money to prepare maintenance every month, cost of assurance to
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car
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very
expensive and price of the
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car
has depreciation, there is
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fence
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of
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. There are,
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aspect
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car
, comfortable feel
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go to everywhere
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, can bring everything suited capacity of
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car
, look for earn money to available rent car.

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, there are
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many
advantages and disadvantages of
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car
depend on the needed. The
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car
is luxuries
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goods
to middle society
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but
to businessman and businesswoman
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car
become obligatory need.
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big
family
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very
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to belong
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car
and
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car
has
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many
benefits to support their activity.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people claim that there are more disadvantage of the car than its advantage. v. 2

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
260 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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