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Housing and accommodation has become a major problem in many countries around the world, what any some of the man factors that have contributed to this problem? What can be done to help reduce the number of homeless people? Give reasons for your answer and v.1

Housing and accommodation has become a major problem in many countries around the world, what any some of the man factors that have contributed to this problem? What can be done to help reduce the number of homeless people? 1
Literacy being the backbone of a nation is a vivid indicator of development. I partially agree with the view that schooling, in particular the primary level of education should be free for everyone. To begin with, it is a natural human tendency that anything which is made free, declines in its value. The same can be the case with information also. The reason higher discipline is viewed with so much of respect is that there is an immense effort which goes into acquiring it. If it was otherwise, a lot of students would not put their mind & soul into it. Furthermore, making higher literacy free would even lower the motivation level of professors & faculties, thereby lowering the overall quality of information. Consequently, there are chances that the failure percentage may increase in case education is made free as the student would not have to bear the burden of fees anymore. There are various ways in which the avenues of discipline can be widely opened & access made easy to every section & strata of people such as providing easy scholarship loans with reduced rate of interest, introducing various effective scholarship policies to the meritorious students at the school level, maximum funding to colleges & universities. For example, the already existing Swami Vivekanand scholarship for the single girl child, for students from socially & economically backward communities has enabled India to progress in the field of education and research. To substantiate further, it has been reported that the number of school dropouts has reduced from 25 million in 2003 to 8. 1million in 2009. To conclude with, primary schools should be made free, but higher discipline should be made more accessible and not completely free.
Literacy being the backbone of a nation is a vivid indicator of development. I
partially
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with the view that schooling,
in particular
the primary level of education should be
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
free
for everyone.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, it is a natural human tendency that anything which
is made
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
free
, declines in its value. The same can be the case with information
also
. The reason higher discipline
is viewed
with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
much of respect is that there is an immense effort which goes into acquiring it. If it was
otherwise
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
would not put their mind & soul into it.
Furthermore
, making higher literacy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
free
would even lower the motivation level of professors & faculties, thereby lowering the
overall
quality of information.
Consequently
, there are chances that the failure percentage may increase in case education
is made
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
free
as the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
would not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
bear the burden of fees anymore.

There are various ways in which the avenues of discipline can be
widely
opened & access made easy to every section & strata of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
such as providing easy scholarship loans with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
rate of interest, introducing various effective scholarship policies to the meritorious
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
at the school level, maximum funding to colleges & universities.
For example
, the already existing Swami
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Vivekanand
scholarship for the single girl child, for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
from
socially
&
economically
backward communities has enabled India to progress in the field of education and research. To substantiate
further
, it has
been reported
that the number of school dropouts has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
from 25 million in 2003 to 8. 1million in 2009.

To conclude
with, primary schools should
be made
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
free
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
higher discipline should
be made
more accessible and not completely
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
free
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Housing and accommodation has become a major problem in many countries around the world, what any some of the man factors that have contributed to this problem? What can be done to help reduce the number of homeless people? 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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