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High stakes English language tests, such as IELTS, are increasingly being delivered on the computer. Do the advantages of computer-based testing outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowl v.1

High stakes English language tests, such as IELTS, are increasingly being delivered on the computer. Do the advantages of computer-based testing outweigh the disadvantages? 1
People’s opinions seem to differ on whether spending cash lavishly on celebrations and special occasions is a positive trend or a mere wastage of money. While some seem to agree with the argument that it is necessary for the society, I believe that such unmindful spending should rather be avoided. To begin with, there are myriad reasons to argue that spending loads of money on weddings and other special occasions is quite unnecessary. Firstly, in most of today’s celebrations there is a deliberate show of power and easy money. Such extensive celebrations are no better than pomp shows. Secondly, instead of spending huge amounts of money on any celebration, it is better to save it and later invest it in better ways. For instance, instead of spending lots of money on a child’s first birthday party in a five-star hotel, it is better to save it for his/her higher education. Furthermore, sometimes spending on special occasions like birthdays, anniversaries and housewarming also become a social obligation for many people and they give in to the societal pressure spending their hard-earned money. On the other hand, people who argue that it is imperative to have grand celebrations opine / insist that it is a way of enjoying life with their family and friends. They feel that such celebrations are part of their customs and traditions. While this may be true to a certain extent, in my opinion, there is no need to spend truck loads of money on celebrations. For example, a birthday party held at home can be as enjoyable as the one held at a five star hotel and yet it costs much less. To conclude, I feel that unmindful spending on any occasion can be avoided. Instead that money should be saved or used in a better way
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’s opinions seem to differ on whether
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spending
cash
lavishly
on
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celebrations
and special
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occasions
is a
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positive
trend or a mere wastage of
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money
. While
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some
seem to
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agree
with the argument that it is necessary for the society, I believe that such unmindful
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spending
should
rather
be avoided
.

To
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begin
with, there are myriad reasons to argue that
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spending
loads of
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money
on weddings and other special
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occasions
is quite unnecessary.
Firstly
, in most of
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today
’s
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celebrations
there is a deliberate
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show
of power and easy
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money
. Such extensive
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celebrations
are no
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better
than pomp
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shows
.
Secondly
,
instead
of
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spending
huge amounts of
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money
on any
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celebration
, it is
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better
to save it and later invest it in
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better
ways.
For instance
,
instead
of
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spending
lots of
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money
on a child’s
first
birthday party in a five-star hotel, it is
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better
to save it for his/her higher education.
Furthermore
,
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sometimes
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spending
on special
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occasions
like birthdays, anniversaries and housewarming
also
become a social obligation for
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many
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
people and
they give in to the societal pressure
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spending
their
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hard
-earned money.

On the other hand
,
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people
who argue that it is imperative to have grand
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celebrations
opine / insist that it is a way of enjoying life with their family and friends. They feel that such
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celebrations
are part of their customs and traditions. While this may be true to a certain extent, in my opinion, there is no need to spend truck loads of
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money
on
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celebrations
.
For example
, a birthday party held at home can be as enjoyable as the one held at a
'five star' is missing a hyphen.
five star
hotel and
yet
it costs much less.

To conclude
, I feel that unmindful
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spending
on any
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occasion
can
be avoided
.
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Instead
that
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money
should
be saved
or
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used
in a
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better
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way
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay High stakes English language tests, such as IELTS, are increasingly being delivered on the computer. Do the advantages of computer-based testing outweigh the disadvantages? 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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