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Healthcare should always be funded by governments, and it should always be free for peopleto use. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this idea? v.1

Healthcare should always be funded by governments, and it should always be free for peopleto use. with this idea? v. 1
Some people would argue that museums should be fun places where others think that the primary purpose of museums is to educate people. According to me, there are different types of museums to serve different purposes. The user can also depend on one’s point of view. Some people hold a view that a trip to museums should be an entertaining and enlightening way to spend the day. There are museums like art museums which are the places for the exhibition of different forms of visual arts such as paintings, sculptures, fine arts, modern arts. Visit such sites would be pleasant and enjoyable. On the other hand, some people firmly believe that museums are places to educate people about history and culture. Museums such as historical museums help people understanding the origin of religion; science museums amuse people with the history behind the inventions, war museums help to gain knowledge of different techniques and tools used in that era. These ways museums educate people in exciting ways. Finally, I would say people should decide the museum to visit based on their purpose. For instance, the art lovers can enjoy a day at the art museum while schools may organise a visit to a historical museum to educate students by showing a wide range of objects and artefacts. Both groups will be satisfied at the end of the day. In conclusion, though there are split opinions on whether museums should entertain people or should educate people, every museum has its purpose and role in society.
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should be an entertaining and enlightening way to spend the day. There are
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like
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which are the places for the exhibition of
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, modern
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. Visit such sites would be pleasant and enjoyable.

On the other hand
,
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understanding the origin of religion; science
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amuse
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people
with the history behind the inventions, war
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in exciting ways.

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people
should decide the
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to visit based on their
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purpose
.
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lovers can enjoy a day at the
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museum
while schools may
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organise
a visit to a historical
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to
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educate
students by showing a wide range of objects and
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or should
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, every
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has its
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and role in society.
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Language comes first. It’s not that language grows out of consciousness, if you haven’t got language, you can’t be conscious.
Alan Moore

IELTS essay Healthcare should always be funded by governments, and it should always be free for peopleto use. with this idea? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
253 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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